The Whispers of War

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by White Scorpion, Nov 16, 2004.

  1. White Scorpion

    White Scorpion 4umotographer

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    I would tread through the sulphur of Hades,
    If it meant to be with you one more time.
    Steal the sandals from the feet of Hermes,
    Just to be with you a few minutes longer.
    Aphrodite's beauty pales next to yours.
    Athina's wisdom could learn from your mind.
    If Apollo played the sweetest melody,
    Only your voice would melt my cold heart.
    Hera would be jealous, but that's normal.
    Hephaistus would explode with envy.
    Poseidon's watery kingdom has nothing
    That matches your sheer brilliance.
    I would rather face the arrows of Artemis,
    Than to lose you for ever.
    I would even make peace with Ares,
    Just to see the smile on your face.
    I would gather a harvest bigger than Dimitra's
    And make sure you're never hungry.
    I would go up against Zeus the Almighty,
    Whether you were right or wrong.
    I would do anything for you,
    But I won't do that,
    I won't sing Meatloaf.
     
  2. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    I'm not a big fan of rhymey poems, but I swear as I read this I could see this in rhyme and it would have been superb and witty...as it stands its very jagged to read.
     
  3. White Scorpion

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    True. I respect that Kitten, because I'm a big fan of yours. I believe it would take me a few lifetimes to progress with this, but in a way I look at it as rough nugget with something shiny on the inside. Maybe sometime I'll hit gold, but in the meantime I hope that maybe I can help inspire others in some way:) PS I was a bit lazy with Gods. I hope they'll forgive me.
     
  4. Hippievixen

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    I LOVE it, Whitescorp... you know how crazy I am about Greek mythology, so this one especially appealed to me.

    But the last 2 lines?! Did you *have* to go there, Scorp?? *giggle* Was the Guiness kicking in?

    Oh well, very lovely, nevertheless, especially:

    'I would tread through the sulphur of Hades'

    I can just see it! And

    "Poseidon's watery kingdom has nothing
    That matches your sheer brilliance."

    I'm totally diggin' it! :)

    *poetic hugz*
     
  5. White Scorpion

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    Thanks Hippievixen. Since Mount Olympus is not very far from my home, it's unavoidable to be influenced by its 12 grand residents. I am a mischievous mortal, however, so I hope I don't incur their wrath, otherwise there won't be a place on earth I could hide from them. Except, perhaps Detroit. Not even they would go there. As for the last lines, you're absolutely right, the Guiness was influencing me more and brought me down to earth with a crash. I must admit poetry is not as easy as it may seem. Contrary to being put off by criticism, I actually feed off it. By listening to people, I try to learn what they like. If I invited you and a few other friends for dinner, I would do my best to cook you something that would impress you, be a bit exotic and with the most wholesome food I could find. It's the same with when I write. I haven't learned how to cook good poetry yet, but I'm learning in this forum from the feedback.
     
  6. KittenX

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    ...I just gotta add that I love the idea/theme! I'm on a total Greek roll right now :)
     
  7. White Scorpion

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    Thanks KittenX. I tried writing something similar again a few says ago and it just wouldn't click, so I gave up. Let me know if you have any luck. I'm going to try again later.
     
  8. somethingwitty

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    Hahaha.

    By the way, I checked up on your "book." Self-publishing company, very impressive, amateur.
     
  9. White Scorpion

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    That hurt. Professional.
     
  10. White Scorpion

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    There's no pleasing anyone! Anyway, here goes:

    A housefly tried to shag an elephant,
    And asked if his penis would fit.
    Jumbo couldn't hear the courtesy,
    And squeezed out half a ton of shit.

    Although the fly was drowning in crap,
    Its whole life flashed before its eyes.
    Sometimes it's better to drown in shit,
    Than be the smallest of the little guys.
     
  11. Hippievixen

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    Dear God, White Scorp...

    You make me laugh until I cry!!!

    *giggles and wipes her eyes*


     
  12. KittenX

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    Major chuckles from me! Awesomeness.
     
  13. White Scorpion

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    Appreciated!:D
     
  14. White Scorpion

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    I am going to try and follow a small trend that's caught my eye, but it's not meant to be offensive or ironic to anyone. I'll try and keep it amusing, otherwise you'll start snoring[​IMG] Forget form, or grace. That's about to go out of the window. Too tired. Ready:

    Papa Don't Bitch!

    Father, you've been a mother all your life.
    You've never ever done anything for me.
    You only care for your latest current wife.
    And that's because she's twenty three.

    You still owe me twenty bucks, you pimp.
    You said it was for an ingrown toe-nail.
    Then you walked into a bookies with a limp,
    And lost it all on a horse without a tail.

    When I was getting mugged by a street gang,
    They hit me with a Dodgers limited edition bat.
    And you stood by watching like an orang utang,
    Saying that the battery in your phone was flat.

    And now I'm dead from fractures, you dozy prick,
    'Coz you couldn't be arsed to be a good father,
    I'm writing this poem with help from a psychic,
    Who said your wife is getting shagged by your brother.
     
  15. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    ~* Browsing thru, this caught my eye. Thanks. I keep forgetting who has continual threads of poetry. *does a hair flip* ah well...Enjoyed, Thanks.*~

    The Code of Courage

    There are some sticky moments,
    That we would all rather forget.
    There always comes a time,
    When we speak words that we regret.
    Who would not turn the clock back
    For just a day, to see things right?
    Who would not stay at home
    Protect his child when there's no light?
    Sometimes we hate one another,
    Sometimes nature joins in.
    If we could learn that there is no other,
    Then maybe,
    Just maybe.
    We might have a chance to win.
     
  16. Hippievixen

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    This was my fave, White Scorp :)

    Especially the last two lines... you are TOO MUCH!!! *giggle*
     
  17. White Scorpion

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    Thank you. I hope you enjoyed mine as much as I enjoy yours[​IMG] I must admit there are times that I feel cheated in life and perhaps the bitterness, or the resignation in anything that I feel serious about may not hit the mark. I consider that 'catharsis'. I find humor, however, a much more verstatile tool of communication. So I'll try and stick with it.<end of self-analysis> My love to you all. Especially Texas[​IMG]
     
  18. White Scorpion

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    To Vincent

    The slow grinding of morphia dust,
    Follows the perimeter of the glass.
    This time a hope the journey will last,
    And too content to care for the mass.
    Fire burns sugar beneath a green sea,
    As demons on the wall are gathering.
    Drink and hear the sandman's soliloquy,
    Waiting for Death to start borrowing.
     

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