sooooooo cute. I love it. Heartfelt, warm, and tender.
this thread is a diamond in the rough
niiiiiice love the poem maybe you should rename the title to give an indication of what it's about tho
"I thank the Chinese who invented the noodle" haha it kept my attention for such a long poem. i love how you're just you, not some juxtaposing...
so does my friend. he's still a fox tho.
I made some peanutbutter-carob things for the freezer and man were they weird but good. I wrote a poem. I daydreamed about my last summer's love...
ha, great problem to have
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Spring bare fields are held hostage under icy skies chilled stars are frozen in place I am gentle light, shining in my master's eye I whisper...
LOL you're such a bitch dopesick
awwwwwww fantastic Stretching the diameter of the (w)hole.
hahahahahahaaahaha I thought I drank a lot of coffee but now I see I don't. thank you for putting it in perspective for me!
ahahah this is a total love-fest in here! i like this poem because you could take away love and put "physics" or "marshmellows" or "terrorism" or...
implanting taboo! nice one.
haha, thanks guys! I feel encouraged :):D and seamonster, "the sunset was hella beautiful..." LOL omgz im so totely ROFL rite now
Then put it away and look at it again in a week. You'll know then what's important and what's not.
You're wordy, but the repetition of "I" at the beginning of each stanza makes it almost not matter. All in all, I love it, but the word "placid"...
Yeah I feel ya Rubin, but Duck, you've got some good lines -- "Paint that covers the blank easel with meaning" and all -- but your poem too long...
this whole poem is really phallic to me... through the whole thing I was thinking about the word "flaccid"... i think its because it rhymes with...
i think you should lose the first stanza and the last three lines... Life dances joyfully in her Margins, blissful even in razor thin...
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