can come back to it later... if you like, keep writing! good stuff!
I did think stool-pidgeons when I read it but wasn't sure. Use to your advantage the streets and cities you are visiting... give us specifics......
Keep writing, this is a good start. I've been writing on and off for a couple of decades and have recently been on a two year binge and I can see...
I assume the words in parenthesis are just your notes - they should be dropped from the final poem. For some reason this title came to me: In...
I enjoyed reading these. You have a distinct voice and I would like to see more of your work.
This is excellent for 5 minutes! good job - doesn't it feel great when it flows like that! Passion is always good for your writing. In going...
:applause: :drummer: :sunny: :rockon: This was awesome. Yes! Your plan to set it aside to rest awhile is a good one. Have a beer on me. Vetty
I'm glad you feel positive about my feedback. Thank you for the compliment. I imagine that you are too hard on yourself and you are a wonderful...
Hey, just read the first version you posted again and see now more clearly what you were aiming for. So would use "appearing heartless...,...
It seems like you wavered a bit… first the master is this evil almost surreal being, then you gave him a heart at the end…. I like that he has a...
I guess I didn't understand your post.... it's your ideas you can't get down in words and I thought you meant you couldn't write about them...
I'll give it a look a little later when I have more time, hope all is well with you.
It just occurred to me why this poem has caused quite a stir... anytime anyone makes a statement... followed by an attack... then it is not...
I'm not sure what the poem is about, so when you pick the title you might pick something to give a clue to the poem. perhaps if I had more time...
I went around and around on this poem and one morning I woke up and said to myself... just personalize it. So it became, "When He Died"... the...
My daddy taught me the lesson of what you have in "Hidden" - but it's probably one of the reasons I'm alone now... keep too much hidden when I...
This reminds me of my early poetry. No images. What I've learned is to find some image that works for this topic... hard to explain but I'll...
So write all your ideas down, you are 16. Maybe when you turn 17 you can find the words and you will have all your ideas listed. Never know. I...
Wow, this is good, but I can see some room for improvement. Sometimes I hate that I'm so anal about this stuff. Sorry in advance! I think the...
Okay, this was a good poem... the message was clearly right wing. Not my thing either... but it was written well... I understand capitalism and...
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