and found this delicious poem! the only place I stumbled was on the word "golden"... the sudden brightness after the muddied darkness threw me...
Here Across hot sun baked stones, dry earth, through dank forests crawling with unspeakables, across places with no horizon I’ve come. Here....
I know you asked for critique... this is a great poem R.D. but I did want to drop a couple of thoughts your way... as with all, take what you like...
I found this awesome... keep writing, you have amazing stuff inside you. My favorite part at the end there: Exceptional is something you have...
I like this one! bleed.on.the.floor. those periods make this genious.
This is a draft of something I wrote this a.m. I've been in a bit of a writing hiatus but jumping into it again, so here I am and here is first...
I agree with the prior comments. Sounds like he doesn't have a skill set that is marketable... but I will try to give you some positive options:...
read this again this a.m. and sensed something ominous behind it. a darkness. as if this "bound to be failure" wants everyone to see that...
What is your language? Italian? I would like to see this in your native tongue if you originally wrote it in Italian... I don't know Italian but...
Hi V. I'm not sure how old you are, but that question about coping with life's reality (look up learned helplessness - a poem topic I've been...
these are nice! you did a great job... look up "haiku" in Wikepedia and it will tell you that sometimes we have to shorten our version (5-7-5) to...
wow, this is incredible... but I've struggled trying to interpret it but perhaps I will come back to it. perhaps a different title could give a...
You feel how "lost" this person is... how alone. There is a contrast (comfort at home - assume alone at home) while there is lonliness in the...
This was fun to read, very good rhyming that doesn't overpower. Linguistic pleasure obvious! I love vivacious crouton! great fun!
Liked the element of "heat" in this: burn, incendiary (which brings to mind incite), match, dynamite title Hooligans is perfect, at first thought...
Virtual Rita vital air, a tart, a trull a Tula ritual rival ‘till Lill. I tilt. Lill, a lilt, a virtu vault a lava villa a larva trail....
thanks... just so you know... this started the same way, I heard the word, looked it up, brainstormed, etc. I don't think I captured all of what...
Okay, here I am... I was reaching for a topic to write about and as much as I tried to come up with something spectacular... here is what...
excellent line... if you are doing this at 16, I wonder what you will be doing at 46 (I'm old~). Stick with it, even if you let it go for...
Hi Halfpint! This poem has good rhythm and I like the idea behind it... something you might try is starting with the "if I was in high school..."...
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