You have reason to be proud.
I didn’t get to grow old with you, ease you into twilight fathom your eyes of mettle. I hear the wind lift you, toss you like an autumn leaf....
Gig, I've been reading your posts and your comments... Simplicity is one thing - look to the Japanese poets for poems that are simple but fresh,...
very worthwhile stuff. keep at it. knowing you are busy with just writing, will not critique but will say... awesome! it is as if I can see...
I like the twist at the end of "wonderfully, blissfully". I would challenge you to write it without using the word "alone" except there at the...
I liked this but was curious about what the exercise was about. On extending it... if you want to make a long poem to describe wedding atmosphere...
Hey there Aidan, I've made some notes in here!
Once, when I thought it was about candlelight car doors opened scented flowers I said, this wasn’t a word about me now, I would get on my...
simple, and I could sense the "run". I liked how the mind is silent during that run...
I'm glad you enjoyed it... thank you for picking such a lovely picture to share, loved how it fit so well with this poem.
most persons are good in general and there is bad in the depths of most persons that can come out in a desperate situation (holocaust). a nasty...
I've gone through a similar "effort" after I read a Mary Oliver poem called "To the Poet with His Face in his Hands". The message there was "the...
thanks Sylvanlightning.
I liked this one, my favorite part is: a numbness that seems to blanket out the frantic seizures of each passing day it has a very nice rhythm...
I especially enjoyed the final two stanzas. You poured a lot of work into this and it shows. It was enjoyable to read... I hope She gets to read...
Frenzied notes along the roof, a rebellious rehearsal. The maestro dozing. Opus of a clinging hungry child. Melody of a calloused mouth...
I am bloody steak. Love is a pit bull from hell that has lost his bone. 5-7-5... i think is right... for haiku. hope you don't mind... your...
nothing to critique... short choppy fragments reflect very well the fragmented and short life of this soul. excellent visuals... shoelace,...
What a great day for me... come to Hip Forums (it's been a long time) and see your excellent little hard-ass poem. Loved It. I'm glad to see you...
I think this was what John Mayer had in his head when he wrote the song Your Body is a Wonderland.
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