Why Can't I Just Be Me?

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Man_In_A_Shed, May 15, 2004.

  1. Man_In_A_Shed

    Man_In_A_Shed Member

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    whilst tidying my room I found this poem I wrote a while ago, I think I was pissed off at something or someone at the time. Its not a great poem, but it summed up how i felt at the time.​


    I could work all day,
    Staring blankly at the screen.
    Hours of my life exchanged for some pay.
    I could by expensive things,
    A new house, new car,
    Get married 3 times spending money on rings.
    It will give my life purpose,
    Money sets you free.
    To be like all the other drones,
    Why can't I just be me?

    Without a job I am useless,
    A blemish on society.
    All I need is to conform and consume.
    Afterall, it will set me free.
    Buy the hip products,
    And discard the old.
    Until I can no longer keep up,
    Then I'll be treated like mould.

    One day I will die,
    In a world so distant.
    People living on the moon?
    Cars that can fly?
    But nobody will remember me as a child.
    The clothes that I wore, the lentgh of my hair.
    Or the sweetness of my smile.
    Nobody will care.

    jamiexx​
     
  2. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    you are you no matter what you want to be, even if you choose to be someone who complains about "why can't i be me?" i dig it, really. it's most certainly heart-felt in its spontaniety.


    much love :)
     
  3. Aditi

    Aditi Member

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    i like too
    and osiris .. . . you posted at 11:11
    and i think that's kinda nice too
     
  4. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    ah, but it was 5:11 my time. does that ruin it for you? lol.

    much love :)
     
  5. Aditi

    Aditi Member

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    LOL - not so much :)
     
  6. SoundStepper

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    As a student, i am currently struggling through my studies, because i am questioning the same why?
     
  7. VanAstral

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    that was sad,
    in a good way.
     
  8. A Clockwork Orange*

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    I think your poem is quite good. I like its Simplicity
     
  9. Man_In_A_Shed

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    thank you for your kindness.



    :)
     

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