War Poetry.

That poem reads like it was written by a 5 year old.

I don't like it because it doesn't stand out in any way, shape, or form.

 

isallcool bro.

You still love me though, don't you?


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when i read fight from kingdom i thought of the air corps. an airborne soldier climbing onto a plane for d-day or something.i may have missed the idea of the poem but i thought it was good....i think charge of the light brigade exemplifies what i felt the op was looking for.perhaps not i don't know.that's how literature is though.....i've always thought " harry wilmans" by edgar lee masters was one of the best poems from "spoon river anthology"....we spoke a little of robert service...born in england moved to canada at 21.ambulance driver and war correspodend in ww1.but i think his poem stories about the yukon gold rush was his best stuff....the ballad of the northern lights...a friend let me borrow the complete works of robert service so ive read everything by him.that was a fun read.

 

not if you're a filthy goy!

 

Who would have ever thought you have such good taste in poetry.

 

You've probably read 100000 times less poems than me, plus... you have shitty taste, so I don't think that you're qualified to make sure a value judgment.

 

100,000 times that means lunaverse has read negative poetry!

 

Anal **** lyrics are some of the best negative poetry.

 

While this one doesn't fit under the OP's war criteria. It seems to fit where this conversation has gone.

And I'm looking forward to your scathing review BraveSirRubin.

_________________

I Implore You

If

you have​

a friend

​

and​

you wish​

to​

keep

​

this friend

​

no matter the reason​

whatever the lore​

however enticing​

with veracity​

I​

implore

​

never​

ever​

EVER

​

brush your hand​

along the​

underside

​

of​

his

coffee table
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___________________

~ JusSumguy

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I like that one much better, even though I don't care for the pointless formatting.

 

I love
pointless and quite annoying formatting and I think your poem is decent.

 

I Know Now

I know now that​

smiles​

would be better

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I know now that​

children are first

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I know now that​

love is fleeting

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I know now that​

bridges​

aren't for​

burning

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I know now that​

people don't leave​

they get​

chased​

away

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I know now that​

loneliness is a​

malevolent friend

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I know now that​

decisions​

define​

a
man
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__________________

~ JusSumguy

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Now that one simply sucks.

 

Welcome to HipForums

 

I never asked nor do I care how much poetry you've read. I'm not sure why you feel the need to tell me how much you've read. Gay. I didn't make any judgment. I complimented you and you took it the wrong way.

 

Get it right up your fat hair tits,
You shagged out old soldier.

Do you think i give a shit if you dead,
I'm shagging your wife,
And she's got great tits.

I don't really know what else to say.

 

I didn't take it the wrong way, I just feel like you need to add more worth to your compliment. Right now it's like a blind man saying "you're pretty".

 

lol. Alright, fair enough.