story ideas (MERGED)

Discussion in 'Writers Forum' started by myself, Mar 27, 2007.

  1. sentient

    sentient Senior Member

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    You have to feel a little bit of sympathy for Nazi's in a way because we all get caught up in things we later regret. i am sure there were many nazis who merely became SS men etc because it provided more protection against the regime to move higher up


    There are actually stories of honourable acts of courage by nazis that made them drop out of their robotic trance and again show their human side for a moment. I also once heard a story from a British soldier that shocked me for its brutality.

    I think its dangerous to say the nazis should be forgiven or forgotten, but I believe that there are also oversights in the history books about humane acts carried out in the trenches and battlefields across the world

    maybe Nackts grandfather or GG was protecting his family by trying to get into the hierarchy

    oh yeah that story by the ex British soldier (an old man when he told me this some 20 years ago) regards an incident that happened when 4 British troops had to escort 4 captured Germans through the lines while under heavy artillery fire. Well they had their orders but then thought "sod this for a bag of shit - we will get ourselves blown to pieces" so they told the germans they could go and run away - but they were to wait in a shell hole till the brits shouted over to them to go. Then they made them lie face down. anyway the brits threw a couple of handgrenades into the shell hole so it looked like the germans took a direct hit and then took cover till the shelling stoped about 5 hours later.
     
  2. CumInMyMouth

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    My Play is a two-hour drama called The Apartment, or A Murder Squared. It is about two women, a mother and a daughter who live together, sans 'Night Mother, or Grey Gardeys. So anyway, The mother, Agatha kills her husband, Sol, and then tell Jack, the daughter about it. They get in huge fights until the policemen show up one night. Then they have to flee, and fast! Oh, by the way, Jack gets engaged to be married. So now, Jack's fiance doesn't know where they live, so before Act II begins Jack and Griffin meet infro nt of the curtain to devise a plan on how they will find eachother. They come up with a code, and share a kiss and the curtain rises on Act II. Now, In Act I, the two women lived in a small mansion but now after fleeing the police, the two now live in a tiny apartment. So the fighting continues until Mr. Ruby, a hit man, comes in and kills Agatha. Jack hired him to kill the mother because the mother killed Jack's father.The closing line of the play? Here it is: JACK(angry)-My mother deserved it. I hate her and I'd rather be an orphan than live with her for the rest of my life. She...deserved...it... THE LIGHTS DIM AND ALL EXIT. LIGHTS UP AGAIN ON AN EMPTY STAGE. THE SCRIM COMES DOWN AND THE FOG BEGINS. END THE APARTMENT, OR A MURDER SQUARED.
     
  3. ronald Macdonald

    ronald Macdonald Banned

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    No its just not funny and infact its so confusing it makes your writing boring like "The Illiad" and "the oddessey" its too confusing man and life isnt long enough for that. My advice is to write it on some paper and then nail it to a tree in the local park and see if anyone reads it long enough to say they are interested. Thats what I do if I want an honest opinion of my work
     
  4. dirtydog

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    deleted, off topic
     
  5. ronald Macdonald

    ronald Macdonald Banned

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    off topic post deleted
     
  6. dirtydog

    dirtydog Banned

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    I pick her up at a bar, we get along fantastically, and she takes me home. She says she has something to show me in the basement, so I go down there.
    "Take all your clothes off." I comply, of course.
    Then she says, "I want to show you a bar trick. Hold out your hands."
    I hold out my hands, palms down, and she puts a small empty glass on the back of each hand and tells me not to drop them.
    "I'll be right back in a minute," she says.
    Coming back, she tells me to hold the glasses, still on the back of my hands, very steady. She pours a bit of wine into each glass. "Don't spill them," she says.
    Then I hear a sharp click as handcuffs close on my wrists.
    "Do you enjoy being whipped?", she asks, with a smile.

    (See Chapter 2, below, this thread)
     
  7. ronald Macdonald

    ronald Macdonald Banned

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    my story idea is that two guys get out of a truck and deliver a piano to a house thats up a big hill and they cannot get the truck all the way to the house. Its called Haurel and Lardy (the piano men)
     
  8. dirtydog

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    Ronald, you may be funny (at best), but you have no chance of getting into Oliver Hardy's league.

    "Now that's a fine kettle of fish you've gotten us into!"

    As for the bondage and whipping story, stay tuned. I might get banned outta here yet.
     
  9. dirtydog

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    Masturbation, whipping, and nipple electrodes. Nacht, you are a true German. Marlene Dietrich would be proud. You are probably in the Bundestag, or whatever it is they call German parliament.

    In the meantime I have to find a woman who will beat me as I deserve... Sorry, no guys, for the time being.
     
  10. ronald Macdonald

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  11. White Scorpion

    White Scorpion 4umotographer

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    I think just reading this thread is rewarding enough without having to actually create any story.
     
  12. ronald Macdonald

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    How did you know I make silent movies, my last one was me with the number 31337 (computer hacker leetspeak for eleet (elite)) and I took a sledgehammer and smashed a computer to pieces - then at the end an anarchist throws a bomb at me (it is round with the word bomb written on it) and theres an explosion and a pair of smoking boots, then a ninja sneaks up on the anarchist and slits his throat then adolf hitler boots the ninja in the nuts and pummels him in the face till he is dead and then someone with a steam iron smashes it into hitlers face
    and so it continues til you see me smashing the computer up again its one of those circular films that could loop forever without seing the join

    I have a lot of respect for stan and olly but if they saw my films I think they would be inspired
     
  13. dirtydog

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    White Scorpion:
    Your latest post (under the pen name "Ronald Macdonald") is more creative than usual. Show it to the head nurse. She might be impressed enough to cut back on your electroshock therapy.

    We are watching all your postings, looking for signs of a progressive attitude that will assist your therapy and eventually promote you from your single cell to a dormitory.
    -- The Big Nurse

    "I am not a crook." -- George Walker Bush
     
  14. White Scorpion

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    DD, take some time off to go somewhere and chill out a bit. There is a lot more to life than a few unknown faces sitting behind a keyboard and insulting you. By taking their bait you are only feeding them. If you don't mind making yourself look foolish by doing that, then fair enough. But if you are allowing other people's immaturity to stress you out, when you could very simply write them on your hairy balls, then who have you got to blame for that? Ronald is like the ebola virus. You can't beat him, but you can avoid him, but once you catch him you're fucked.
     
  15. ronald Macdonald

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    DD you are obsessed with me - please calm down and then when you see the funny side just chill and be nice
     
  16. dirtydog

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    You are both right. Neither of you is worth talking about. I tell you what: I'll quit talking about you, if you stop adding your idiotic posts to my threads. Deal?
     
  17. ronald Macdonald

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    deal or no deal ?
    are you that guy called Noel Edmonds ?
     
  18. White Scorpion

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    I'll take the £9000. It's a fair price to pay to be left alone I think.
     
  19. ronald Macdonald

    ronald Macdonald Banned

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    I like this guys story

    http://gorillamask.net/gayspank.shtml

    I love the bit about poouring sand on each others buttcracks
    and when he does that thing with both his hands - Really even if u have a slow connection let this download and watch it all its absolutely brilliant
     
  20. dirtydog

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    Caution: Adult Rated Material​
    *********​
    "Do you like to be whipped?", she asked with a smile.
    "I don't think so, it's never happened."
    "It doesn't really matter whether you like it or not. What matters is whether I like it. And the fact is, I do. I want to hear you scream."
    "Very funny, Mary. Let's unlock these. It's time I went home."
    "No, darling, it's not time for you to go home. We haven't even had any fun yet. Let's play Zorro."
    ********
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    "Zorro?"
    "Yeah, sweetheart. The Mexican bandit with the whip, punishing the bad guys and saving innocent peasants. He likes to make the sign of the Z on the bad guy's ass before riding off into the sunset."
    "But I'm not a bad guy."
    "Well, mistakes happen. I'll apologize tomorrow morning. Now I have to let you know that you're allowed to scream. I don't have any nearby neighbors, and we're in the basement. Why don't you plead for mercy in advance, before we get started?"
    "You ****."
    "Yes dear, I'm one hundred percent, FDA inspected ****. And you and I are going to have a good time together."
    She goes to the window, one with Venetian blinds, and removes a plastic adjusting rod about two feet long. It is thin, flexible, and very innocent looking.
    "Actually, darling, I'm not going to just whip your ass. The front of your thighs will work fine, as will the area around your nipples. I won't touch your cock, your testicles, face, neck or kidneys with the rod."
    "We should have a safe word."
    "No, darling, I know what safe is, and I'm never unsafe. That means you can scream as loud as you like, you can take pain you think is completely beyond your limits, and I still won't stop until I've had my fun. Ever been fisted in the ass? Ever screamed until you went hoarse? I tell you, we're both going to enjoy this. Oh and by the way, if you're not screaming loudly enough, I have a male friend who would like to join in.
    ***************​
    Optional Ending 1
    Dirtydog continues with a lurid description of a BDSM session, and gets banned by the hipforum free speech police.
    Optional Ending 2
    Our male hero manages to call 9-1-1 and have his tormentor arrested and charged with assault.
    Optional Ending 3
    Our heroine has a change of heart. "I am not the wicked witch, darling. I am actually a good princess, and you are my knight." She removes the handcuffs, they kiss (et cetera), the princess and knight fall in love, get married and live happily ever after in a castle on a hill. But first, the knight has to slay the dragon living in a cave under the hill, et cetera. ​
    Optional Ending 4
    You, dear reader, come up with something to inspire all of us.​
     
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