Rose of dew

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by sylvanlightning, Jan 10, 2005.

  1. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

    Mist shrouds,
    the horizons' shoulders,
    as a wary scene
    from an archaic moor.

    All is stillness,
    ephemeral quietude,
    save the ticking of clocks
    slightly offset.

    And it begins,
    a crystalline beading
    of geometric precision,
    petals of dew fall like veils.
     
  2. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

    Sylvan... this is outstanding... not unlike your other postings...

    You make me a better writer, just reading your works.
     
  3. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

    i like it.
     
  4. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

    thank you both for responding, it always feels good to receive feedback.
     
  5. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

    Gentle voice in this, I loved the specifics such as "horizons' shoulders," "slightly offset", "petals of dew" made me smile.
     
  6. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

    All is stillness,
    ephemeral quietude,
    save the ticking of clocks
    slightly offset.
    --------------------
    Thank you, lol~*
     
  7. *peace*child*

    *peace*child* Member

    Good poem, keep writing.
     
  8. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

    The last stanza is a perfect description of this poem, or your style in general. Every syllable serves its purpose, here. I absolutely love it. The only complaint I have is that you’re not posting as much anymore! Had to dig it up… :) Hope all is well with you, and glad you could stop in to share this!
     
  9. Smiling_Rose

    Smiling_Rose Member

    this is so, so good! post more!!
     
  10. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

    Thank you all for your kind comments.
     

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