Rhymes or Reason

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  1. Candy Gal

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    Scatterday and the sun shone bright
    Made me want to take up flight
    They gathered on the beaches here
    Today none had any fear
    Now the night is here and dark
    I wonder if they drink in the park
     
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  2. BJintheUK

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    Last day of the month today. I'm surprised I've managed this far to keep writing more and more drivel, but keep writing it I do. Anyway, here's today's little ditty that has a nautical theme.

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    Deep beneath the ocean waves
    the mud stirs silent in the dark
    leviathan becomes awake
    it feels a hunger deep and sharp

    soon rising on the swirling currents
    it drifts aloft to smell the sea
    and search for food it can consume
    not just a snack will quell its need

    so fish and seals are soon discounted
    it feels vibrations deeper still
    as whale and orca cruise above
    it comes upon them from below

    but as it closes on its prey
    a new distraction clouds its mind
    vibrations of a different shape
    that pound its head from deep inside

    for these emit from nothing living
    nothing with a beating heart
    where breath's imbibed through gills or blow hole
    packed with muscle eyes and teeth

    the unknown monster ploughs the deep
    it courses through without a challenge
    for nothing can devour it or
    try to beat to ocean's floor

    the huge but never seeing beast
    that bends the water currents as
    it pushes on through warm and cold
    currents that sweep ocean depths

    inhabitants that know their ocean
    flee in panic when it passes
    constantly it stays in motion
    never sleeping never eating

    leviathan can only watch
    and wonder what this strange beast is
    with giant hump upon its back
    that has no eyes or mouth or teeth
    so cannot battle with another
    for the harvest of the sea

    and so the two gigantic monsters
    turn to go their separate ways
    the submarine returns to port
    leviathan slides silently away

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    Back to school tomorrow, for some at least, and all the poor supporting staff that cater to their every need. :)
     
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    Brilliant addition as always BJ. XXX
     
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    "New Moon, New Month, - the wheel doth turn,
    A time of reflection, of what ones learned,
    There's good and bad, - time takes its' toll,
    Can break the heart, strip at one's soul,
    - Though one can take this gauntlet, and
    Strike back with resolve, - can make a stand,
    Draw line in sand, and face the fear,
    And vow to live, a better year
    "
     
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  5. BJintheUK

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    March 1st today, and in my effort to become a better poet I read up about different poetry forms, types, etc. One I came across is the acrostic type. The way it works is that you have to read the first letter of each line going down and it spells out a word. So I thought I'd have a go, and here's what I wrote. In case you don't get it I'll put the acrostic words after the poem.

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    Must I write this here
    as though I felt good cheer
    rare though it is for me to say
    change is surely on its way
    however we may wish it weren't so

    1 cannot be quite so self assured
    surely you can see that's quite absurd
    to think you can defeat what must be fate

    Above is an example you might see
    created by none other than just me
    reacting to a prompt from off a page
    opened for to help me see the light
    savoured by my intellect to write
    this small verse of lines for your delight
    in such a short and neverlasting time
    cut through with solid meter and with rhyme

    Perhaps I can try to make amends
    open a new page to see what message that it sends
    engage with others who know what to do and
    memorise those deep embedded clues

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    OK, so the clever ones will have seen the following; March 1st Acrostic Poem

    See you tomorrow. :)
     
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  6. Candy Gal

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    My mind is blank
    But thanks BJ I just have no poem today
     
  7. BJintheUK

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    Candy Gal,

    You don't need one.

    Whatever you choose to write, and whenever you decide to do so is your choice, so please don't feel obliged to write stuff just because I have.

    Don't forget that the main reason I post up everyday is because I made a committment to myself to do it, and as such I force myself to think of something new everyday. I thought it would get easier with time, but I'm beginning to think otherwise now, as subjects for my rhymes seem to be drying up. Still, I'll keep going as long as I can before the well dries up altogether.

    :)
     
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  8. Candy Gal

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    Thesaurus is your friend. xxx

    Beware the Ides of March
    Look at the tides of March
    They lash against the sand
    But now are calm on land
     
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  9. BJintheUK

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    Hello again, I've altered the acrostic poem a bit, so here's the new version. I think it flows better and adheres to the meter better than the one I posted earlier.

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    Must I write these thoughts of mine just here
    as though I felt life full of morning cheer
    rare though it is for me to boldly say
    change must come it's surely on its way
    however we may wish it would go away

    1 cannot be quite so self assured
    surely you can see that's quite absurd
    to think you can defeat what's been deferred

    Above is an example you might see
    created by none other than just me
    reacting to a page prompt I'll agree
    opened for to help me see the light
    savoured by my intellect to write
    this small inviting verse for your delight
    in such a short and neverlasting time
    cut through sometime with meter and with rhyme

    Perhaps I ought to try to make amends
    open a new page to see what message that it sends
    engage with others who know what to do and
    memorise those deep embedded clues

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    See you tomorrow. :)
     
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  10. BJintheUK

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    Well, it's March 2nd today and I couldn't think of what to write, so this evening's poem is a little shorter than most. I'm hoping I can find something good to write about tomorrow.

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    March has started, so where's the bang
    I guess it must still be a lamb
    but when the wind blows open doors
    then we'll hear the lion's roar
    for Spring will spring in twenty days
    and blow the Winter clean away

    soon the olden New Year's day
    will mark the new financial year
    the flowers show their sunward face
    and April then steps up a gear
    the growing season has begun
    as shoots emerge to feel the Sun

    in days the grass has started growing
    blossoms turn the trees pale pink
    daffodils yellow trumpets showing
    and all it seems within a blink
    the sun now rises with the larks
    the sap is rising all around
    in woods and even city parks
    the fruits of Winter's rut abound

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    Not very good I know, but I'll try harder tomorrow, promise! :)
     
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  11. Candy Gal

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    They are always good. Xxxx
     
  12. BJintheUK

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    A bit late tonight because I've been busy doing engineering stuff all day. This one's about one of nature's little wonders, gloworms, and the fact that in two or three places in the world every year in June or July the males all gather in one place and flash in sync with each other instead of whenever they feel like. This give an effect similar to watching Christmas lights that flash together in a tree, but the spectacle is put on in late Spring, early Summer.

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    Gloworms

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    The flickering light ignites the night
    the strobing darkness hurts the eye
    when from the shadows spring the bright
    and warming glows that elicit sighs
    of wonder and of great delight
    from all who see them in the sky

    the tiny insects flash together
    why we never really know but
    when they do it's one of nature's
    greatest shows they can put on
    when mating season comes around
    across the great and wild unknown
    the males all gather in one place to
    show the females where they are

    but only in two or three locations
    does this yearly show appear
    where all the males will flash together
    as though the trees have Christmas lights
    but in the Spring and not in Winter
    does this yearly show take place
    and when it does the tourists flock
    to film the lights from God's own grace

    for mysteries like this abound
    I sometimes wonder why we fear
    such things that nature spreads around
    to give us cause to wish to gather
    in one place to wait and see if
    whales or gloworms will perform
    their party tricks for us tonight

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    See you tomorrow. :)
     
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    love it xxx
     
  14. BJintheUK

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    March Fourth, or march forth? Which should it be? I was going to use the pun about marching forth, but couldn't think of anything to write, so instead I did a poem about numbers and people's obsession with them.

    Yer 'tis!

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    The magic of numbers

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    March fourth, May fifth, June sixth and July seventh
    have something in common which I won't hide
    they're all in the first line of this poem
    so ponder that when you have time

    the magic of numbers for all to see
    when you pick them they could be
    the lotto numbers that you choose
    to make you rich one day perhaps
    so let the numbers bubble up
    they'll tell of gains and handicaps
    just like tea leaves in your cup

    boil your kettle and brew your tea
    then pour to find what fate has chosen
    if you want to keep your options
    your beverage should now be frozen
    then in future you can reopen
    the archives showing the path you chose
    so you can recall when important
    your motives that are now disclosed

    numbers can guide you through your life
    they're not just random in the ether
    when arranged in a certain order
    it seems in truth they can deliver
    if sometimes for worse and some for better
    then what are the odds we should consider?

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    Just think, tomorrow never comes! Because when it does it becomes today, and is no longer tomorrow. Doh! my brain hurts. :)
     
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    Remember this BJ.
    Frixday is tomorrow.
    A day for spreading love and kisses. X
     
  16. BJintheUK

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    Sorry Candy Gal, but the poem below is something of a rant about society today. I started it with just the idea of carpet slippers being all warm and cozy, but then it grew out of my control into a raging monster of anger and angst. So anyway, you've been warned, read it or leave it at your discretion. :)

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    Lost times

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    Cold outside but warm in here
    sit here in my favourite chair
    cup in hand I watch the box
    carpet slippers warm my feet
    looking at the programme sets
    of the England I knew in years gone by
    I feel a sense of loss sometimes
    and others I just want to cry

    for all I knew when I was young
    has now been thrown into the flames
    of white hot progress
    or so it seems
    all that was good about those times
    is now considered old and bad
    and though some bits still seem to chime
    I find I still feel loss and sadness
    for those fun times we had back then
    before the world was turned upside down

    when fashions were daft even to us
    but some of them spoke of elegance
    when despite the beginnings of fluid gender
    girls and boys dress was still distinctive
    boys in platforms, baggies and tanks
    girls in their floral Laura Ashley dresses
    with flowing long and windblown tresses
    soft curves tempting brash young men
    to copy our heroes Bowie and Stewart
    I well remember them

    as they preened and strutted out their stuff
    on the dancefloor with feathered hair
    like a peacock's shining plumage
    flying in all directions every which where
    as they threw themselves into the beat
    till they fell off starred and spangled
    brightly leather clad platformed feet

    gosh those things were so hard to walk in
    I nearly broke my ankles but I did enjoy the height
    although sometimes it gave me a bit of a fright
    to see things as I'd never seen them
    being as short as I normally am

    but all that's gone now the new world's here
    where people no longer enjoy a beer
    down the pub with all their mates
    but now have wine or healthy spritzers
    to slake their thirst as trends dictate
    and pie and chips is out the door
    now replaced by fancy plates
    of raw fish curry and maybe more
    exotic dishes from the East
    a veritable moving feast

    attitudes are now so false and plastic
    that genuine talent no longer matters
    if you can smile to laptop cameras
    persuade the people you're the source
    of all they want to see and wear
    then you'll be an internet star of course

    one of the new influencers
    shaping teenage fashion and ideas
    to suit big business and corporate suits
    channeling young minds into ever deeper ruts
    where college no longer challenges you to think
    but now lets you just feel safe and sink

    into a warm and mushy soup
    of set ideas and attitudes
    dictated by those in the know
    the power movers with their own agendas
    who train you to dance like puppets to their
    dark and political wrapped out tunes

    so you sit and play with fluffy puppies
    while you imagine yourself as a star to be
    staring at your laptop camera and
    strutting your stuff for all to see

    thank goodness I'm not young today
    is all that I can find to say
    the latest snowflake generation
    has no idea of what will hit them
    when the rug gets pulled away
    with the NHS sold to the highest bidder
    they'll have to work till their dying day

    I just worry for my children
    who must live on in this locked down world
    after I've put all my toys away
    and packed my suitcase
    I'll be on my way
    to God's waiting room and there I'll stay
    till I'm called to go and then I'll pray
    that I've made a good impression
    I don't want to go to a Hellish prison
    but instead wish to end my days
    in the sunshine of the other place

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    I hope it's warmer tomorrow, I might be in a better mood then, and perhaps I'll write something light-hearted, or even funny? Who knows what tomorrow brings, eh? We can only sit and wait, but with an Irish Whiskey and lemonade to help the long hours pass. :)
     
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    yOU poured your heart out there BJ. XXXX
     
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    Brilliant mate .

    That is exactly how I felt and drove me into a depression .

    I miss the socialising on the Saturday night out and I know others as well as myself who are struggling .

    But at last the end is in sight and will happen :)
     
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    Saturday today, and Saturday's child works hard for a living. Good job I wasn't born on Saturday then wasn't it? So I can laze around all day without doing a thing, well I can now I'm retired. :)

    Anyway, this isn't getting us very far is it? So here's today's ode, and it's a little more light-hearted than yesterday's one.

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    The Ravens of the Tower

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    "The time has come!" the raven cried "to purloin golden rings!"
    and with that spoken aim he tried to spread his coal black wings
    but though he tried until he sighed the wings could not be spread
    for someone else had bound them, so he had to walk instead

    now walking isn't easy if you're not designed to do it
    despite the onset of much pain you have to work on through it
    for only then can you progress to find your chosen goal
    and not look like the raven did, a bird sized lump of coal
    that has to leap aside when people just don't see you there
    while ambling along or simply out in the fresh air

    so poor old raven had to hide till he could free his wings
    then fly around this ancient Keep to find and steal those rings
    for he is proud and shouts aloud, he sounds just like the boss
    who boasted of his prowess, now he has to pay the cost
    humiliated, tired and weary raven slinks away
    "perhaps I'll try to purloin golden rings another day"

    the moral of this sorry tale is to not make rash claims
    'cause if you fail then like the raven you will only gain
    a reputation as a loud and boring personage
    who thinks he is much better than the normal average
    but average is what he is when he's compared with others
    of his own breed, the ravens who are known by their black feathers
    who flock together when they can and hunt for shiny things
    like jewels and silver amulets, and even golden rings

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    Have a good one! Saturday night that is, and I'll see you tomorrow. And if I don't see you through the week I'll see you through the window. Heh, Heh! :)
     
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    Love it xxx
     

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