This is the opening of my new poem. The other words will come later. I hope you like the opening and I hope it caught your attention and makes you yearn for more.
When I get more I will post it directly. At the moment I am pondering a very strong and charismatic second line.
Okay, I got two very strong second lines. I let you be the judge and pick one (or none). If you pick none I will think of a few others. 1. 'Rest forever and again' 2. 'Thy work is done, this is the end'
i won't pick any of them, cuz it should be your poem. don't think much, just write the way you feel it.
Indeed, most poets do that, but I want to be different. Creating a poem is a very straining process and I want to ease things a bit by getting help and not having to make all the literary decisions myself.
it's called an epitaph.... i love how this place got gloomy&dark all of a sudden.... you guys make me feel at home
Rest in peace, dear existence thy work is done, this is the end That is what I have so far. Now I will be thinking of the third line and I will try to make it as strong and meaningful as the first two. This one goes out to all hippies in general and to the young hippies specifically.
Thank you, appreciating your support. Next lines coming up soon, so have a little more patience and you will be greatly rewarded.
