Hey guys! I'm an 18 year old lyricist from Ireland, highly unrecognized and would appreciate it a lot if you could check out this rap that I wrote, maybe even leave a few suggestions/feedback! Thanks I'm sick of walkin' up and down, Constantly pacin', Always contemplatin' the situations that Dom is facin', Thinkin' about the place that I was raised in, The kid who always tried hard but no one praised him, And Karma is a bitch, I never knew I'd get her, But I did and wrote a rap in the form of a huge suicide letter, Happyness for me is an illusion, I see every form of help as an intrusion, All this confusion makes it feel like suicide is my conclusion, Or maybe I've just fuck all else to do son, It's like the pain is fake, But I'm hit with a real strike, And it's so hard to find the words to describe what it feels like, I think "confused" is the only definition, Tryna figure out my next step, Will it be death or prison? They tell me to talk but they're too fuckin' deaf to listen, The devil's exorcism always influences my next decision, They snatch away my happyness and say I can't have it, And convince me that fallin' in love is just a bad habit, Askin' God if there's anyone else out there as sad as me, Mad as me, Losin' their sanity to all the inhumanity, Searchin' for an escape route but theres no plan to find, I laugh when people say they'd never leave a man behind, Claim they're religious and that the only thing they fear is hell, But when their friend loses everything, They disappear aswell, Its fair to say that pain made me insane and held me under restrain, Everything I gained went down the drain when I met Mary Jane, And when she got the better of her guys she'd fuckin' ditch the men, Right now I feel like I'll never fuckin' touch the bitch again, But who's to say I will? Who's to say I won't? Who's to say I want her back? Who's to say I don't? Man I don't know but maybe all this stress just comes from agein', I'm re-arrangin' my life, From this moment on... I'm changin'.
Your writing is pretty great! You should really upload something of you actually rapping so we can see the flow! Also check out my rap sometime if you want https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_zi7Djed7ME
