Polluted Lake Lenore

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Incubus, May 13, 2004.

  1. Incubus

    Incubus Banned

    Water willows weep once more,
    Shifting shades of shallow shore,
    Posiedon prays protection for,
    The sandy beach of lake lenore,
    Ignorant current endless stream,
    Reality rains this is no dream,
    Polluted puddles count the score,
    Turns the beauty of Lake lenore,
    Grazing geese Guzzling GORE,
    Graffitied glory... Infectious spore,
    Spawn men about the sandy shore,
    Infecting my lovely lake Lenore.
     
  2. Incubus

    Incubus Banned

    Bump- I enjoy constructive criticism please reply.
     
  3. Sebbi

    Sebbi Senior Member

    I would crit it but I can't see any editing points.

    I love it, you have obviously just been reading Poe, you can smell the simarlarity in styles.

    That isn't a bad thing though, as I've said, reflect the voices of all through yourself...

    Blessings

    Sebbi
     
  4. Incubus

    Incubus Banned

    Please people reply I am trying to see if I should use this for my college portfolio! Thanks - Kyle
     

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