On a dark starry night

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Manolao, Aug 16, 2005.

  1. Manolao

    Manolao Member

    ....on a dark starry night I started breathing you... desiring you....
    longing for a little caress of you...

    on a dark starry night
    my heart slipped downhill
    no breakes for an aid

    on a dark starry night
    celestial angels begun to sing
    the most precious melody of Love..

    on a dark starry night
    my dreams came to Earth
    and me to Heaven

    I'm Italian and of course my english is really poor for poetry...
    and I also feel many discrepancies in rhythm and metric of this poem...

    but it's just was I am feeling right now for a wonderful angel from moscow I felt in Love at first sight...

    and I want to remember the night we met in this way...

    Kisses to all the Loving Souls!!!!
  2. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

    Bella, Prego.

  3. Manolao

    Manolao Member

    ohh, thanks dude! :)

  4. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

    I think you did a fine job capturing the moment. The last stanza was my favorite. I love that feeling :)
  5. gotta love how people start off their stories in like an action word. On a dark scary night

    See it gets you to read more.
  6. Good stuff!
  7. Manolao

    Manolao Member

    thx friends.... the lovely person whom this poem is dedicates appreciated it as well... defining it "fascinating song of our souls" eehh...

    LOVE is so amazing.... :D

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