New song & video! Feedback needed please!

Hello all, i'm a singer/songwriter from Northern Ireland and just wanted to share with you a new tune i put together a few weeks ago called Tonight.
I was lucky enough to be invited over to perform in Nashville USA at the famous Bluebird Cafe back in June and it was that trip that inspired me to write this song.
Its a pretty chilled out tune with a summery feel to it.
Check it out below if you have a spare moment for new music.
All feedback welcome

Chris Keys - Tonight (Live)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XyFxtLCouiQ

Cheers
Chris

http://www.chriskeys.com/
https://www.************/chriskeysofficial

 

Your song is pleasant enough...And now I don't want to criticise,because it's your expression.The parts hang well together,and the production is pretty good.You can carry a tune,but at times the melody sounds a bit so so. As a songwriter myself this is something I also struggle with - how to lift the tune into that special zone that makes it just that bit better.That said,I can feel the sincerity in your voice.But I think it might be an album track rather than a single.But overall,I quite enjoyed it.Hope I haven't been to harsh.

 

Not a tall Fairlight, i appreciate the feedback especially from another musician
Thanks again.
Chris

 

I am playing your song again.I see you view count has gone up significantly.Good for you.

 

Cheers good to know!!

 

Any one else got any constructive criticism for me? Im trying to improve my music video making skill and your thoughts are appreciated.

Thanks

 

I was kinda thinking the song is to long?
And maybe the lighting is to much making unwanted shadows?
Also is it just me or does the video look a little squeezed or something?
These are only small issues of course.

 

For anyone who enjoyed the song here are the lyrics

Tonight by Chris Keys

V.1 When will you see
what you mean to me
listen to your heart
and walk on out, from the dark.
HHHHHHHMMMMM -----------
what must i do
to make it clear to you
love is all we need
so please oh please, wait for me.

C.1 And the day will turn into the night
with you by my side to hold
and the moon beams down
over our little town
it feels so right, tonight ----------
Oh -- Oh ---------- Oh -- Oh ------------ Oh -- Oh

V.2 How can i try
to keep you on my side
believe in all you dream
and meet me somewhere in between.
HHHHHHHMMMMM -----------
One of these days
we might find our way
two lost and lonely minds
oh please oh please, oh be mine.

C.2 Repeat C.1 with 4th line:
It shines so bright, tonight -----------
Oh -- Oh ---------- Oh -- Oh ------------ Oh -- Oh
2x Oh -- Oh ---------- Oh -- Oh ------------ Oh -- Oh