My First Peom.. Please Be Gentle With me :P

Nothing Never, Everything Forever

Your lips are soft but,
I will never kiss them.
They will forever stay,
Your mystery.

I can feel your hidden glances
As I know you feel mine,
But those short stares will remain nothing
Nothing more than hidden.

Your hands are warm,
Though they will never embrace
The shivering hands
Kept inside my pocket.

All of these nothings
All of these nevers
Have become my forever
My everything

Everything I desire
But nothing i can have
Never we will be but,
Forever I am wishing

 

good job troy...
i liked it all up until the last verse... kinda disapointing maybe..but youll get better
thats probobly just a personal preferance though im sure other people will like it.

 

i thought it was alright, man =) for a first, its elegant and neat. like tommy said, keep practicing and you'll get really good at it =)
is this a real girl youre writing about?

 

Passionate, fleeting and gentle. Filled with Anima.
A trembling lotus, longing for a lifemate, desiring eternity.

 

i like it

 

for a first, pretty good form

standard content but executed fairly well

my favorite part:

Your hands are warm,
Though they will never embrace
The shivering hands
Kept inside my pocket.