My Feeble Attempt at Writing

well cause i guess its the "accepted"thing to do, ill do it...mkae a place where i can just dummp all of my stuff when it comes...

SOMEDAY

Catch the moon, tie it down
Have it light our world
Thinking of you brings me up, when I am down.

Running round, I chase my reflection
Not knowing what’s on
You bring center to my life, walking hand in hand.

You never cease to exist
Nor what we have
Always caring and feeling, free us from all.

Touching my soul like NO-one can
Melting my heart, take it away
I wish to be with you, will be someday.



Connected Hikau Poems

My feelings for you
Rise with the moon but do not
Set when light comes to

The clouds that shut that
Sky and bring darkness today
Your soul brightens the rest

I cannot relate
All of my feelings for you
Day comes tomorrow

I love the moon yet
Its light is not that which you
Put into my heart

Hair flows in the wind
As the eagle soar high
Seen from forest green

The soul you must see
Is more than just the spirit
But ev’rything you

Sadie beautiful
Woman. Lovely girl, takes my
Heart to the Moon Man



Good Morning, Good Day, Good Night


Good morning,
Good day,
Good night, I say

To you when I go
And cannot stay

I bid you adieu
When the lights have gone
And wait for the morning
Hear the birdie’s song

The meadows of my heart
Bloom with daisies et fleurs
J’adore tu, je t’adore

What is this I feel
I cannot tell you
It is not lust, nor greed
For neither of those feel so right

I must be going
My sweet Sarah

Good morning
Good day
Good night



THINKING OF YOU

My heart burns with joy
When my thoughts wander to her
My head aches with pain
When the thoughts turn to danger.

And sickness, as with hurt
Consume our physical lives
Let you and I think of
Good things that never die.

Water gleaming in the ever burning
Time with those we love
Thoughts of flowered fields on a lazy afternoon
For thoughts may be all we have, in the time of gloom.



FEAR OF DYING

The primal fear of dying
Which man inherently has
Goes without understanding
Conducted with no bounds.

Our conscious world is fading
Now fleeting and leaving
Ever faster ever slower
Forever but not for too long

Your body is not in control of your senses
Senses not og the mind
Our mind is the master of ourselves
He is the master of all

So bring your joy and love to Him
You are never alone or not loved
He is the One and only
He will see you in the end



BALLAD OF MOLE

I’m stepping outside my bounds for you
The things I say to
Not familiar with myself to be this way
I want it to stay
This feeling today

More pen than I have ever before
I love it this way
Not judging me on what I do
I am being true
Never thought of life without – you

Love is just a word
Thrown around in the now
I can’t say I do, but give it time
I might learn how

I’m stepping out of my bounds for you
The things I say to
Believe that what I say is true
Want it to be
All it can be

For you



so there are all my peoms to date....w/e, i don't even care if anyone even reads this...

 

well after my part A chem exam today, i got lots of writing done...here it is oin entirety...

LINES ON MY PAGE

Filling up my page with rhymes
Has been a goal of mine
For in it comes the challenge
Of writing on their minds
Speaking for others
When they no want for
Is a challenge and a passage
That I am looking for
So in this page not look at
But through the lines
For what you are saying


One line poem


FROM THE HEART

As I sit, thinking time will never go
Longing to feel your light, see you
That time shall come, but until then
I must say; How I feel takes no words
What I think is not of the mind
But of the heart

Sometimes, in my past, there have been times
When my thoughts were similar to these
But what is different, is not the same
For this is different, I hope you can see
I care never like this before
I care with all

I promise my heart, I promise it all
I will never stop caring, never cease feeling
I am almost out of room for this message to continue
So with these last few lines
I send my thoughts, my care
From the heart



SHORT HIKAU

The gentle brook sings in the air
With love
It carries my thoughts to you



FUNNEL SINGER

A funnel is a glorious thing
That lets you pour, and lets you sing



SORT LINE WITH MESSAGE

Sneaking like a snake in small places, Freed when opened


SRINKING HOLE

I hate to be a preacher
But I must voice my concern
Mankind needs a new hope
A 180 turn
For we cannot continue
Living in a hole
For the hole is getting smaller
Than we can take



TIME’S UP

My time is almost up
Almost time to go
The time has come
The time has gone
No more time for me
But all the time with Him


TRIANGLES

The
Triangle
Is a fun little
Shape that longs
To be held, but cannot
Keep its shape



OIL

I see the people
Mindless drones
Drinking coffee at work
Paying the price
For oil with blood
Not the few, the proud,
The rich



well again, up to date, except for a special little diddy written directly for Sarah [Sadie], that you may understand why im not going to share...

 

~* some of this is pretty good. This may be my first and last response to you though. The reason I will post, and about the only thread I can see that you have responded to in the poetry forum besides your own. Thanks for making one thread. *~

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5) If I see someone that has posted and hasn't made any responses to anyone elses work, I also will not bother with them. This has happened frequently around here over the years, people bitch and whine about getting no attention but they don't bother to give any either. Some people only reap what they sow.

 

These were my favorite two. The first is quite visual and effective and the second is fun-filled abstract imagination. Thanks for sharing.

 

the second of the two, the last lins is suppose to be, when wriiten out, in bigger letters, but it lost its effect on here...

EDIT: oops, didn't go back and check it out...i guess it was big, silly me...

 

SOMETHING I WHIPPED OFF TONIGHT

The moon lights my path
On a dark winter night
My thoughts of you
Cut through the dark of my life

The cold wind wispers your name
Sarah, it calls to me
My feelings for you I relate to it
they soothe its suffering

The snow that falls, falls on my face
And in the palm of my hand where it melts
Where it melts as the heart does
When I think of you, Sweet Sadie

Tonight, I wish you sweet dreams
and sweet thoughts

 

I really liked this opening and the short haiku that was right after.

FROM THE HEART

As I sit, thinking time will never go
Longing to feel your light, see you
That time shall come, but until then
I must say; How I feel takes no words
What I think is not of the mind
But of the heart

 

i haven't been writing in a bit, and i wrote this last night...


LEAVES ME SPEECHLESS

My heart is massaged
With thoughts of your kind ways
With thoughts or your overwhelming beauty
That leaves me speechless.

My eyes aren’t mistaken
But that is not a mirage
But you in beauty
That leaves me speechless.

Seeing you, thinking of you
Lights my heart like a thousand candles
Lights so bright, the sun is envious
That leaves me speechless.

Touching my soul in a unique way
Comes without you trying
Comes in a way never felt before
Sarah, you truly leave me speechless.

 

Not a sound is heard
Children crying, adults weep
Break the silent shore

 

SOUNDS OF WAR

The sounds are here
The sounds are there
The sounds, the sounds – everywhere

Now all is quiet
Before the storm
Death and destruction in the air

The shouting, the screaming
Unnatural thunder breaks the ground
Fires of Hell encompass the earth
As demons clear the land

Now all is silent
Not a sound to be made
For all things are gone
Never to be heard

 

Shivering alone in the cold
Asthoughts of you grow
Warmth comes to me



Doves
Above
Forever
Forever


for some reason i never posted this next one...

My heart burns with joy
When my thoughts wander to her
My head aches with pain
When the thoughts turn to danger

And sickness, as with hurt
Consume out physical lives
Let you and I think of
Good things that never die

Water gleaming in the ever burnoing sun
Time with those we ove
Thoughts of flowred feilds on a lazy afternoon
For thoughts may be all we have, in the time of gloom

 

~* Nice read, thanks Burbot. I didn't care for these two lines thought,
My head aches with pain
When the thoughts turn to danger
Didn't seem to fit and made it start out...dunno if cliche is the right word. Liked the message in this piece alot, sometimes all we can have is good thoughts/memories and a positive mental outlook. Thanks

 

ya, that may have been why i didn't share it before...i don't even know if i like it that much...

 

The rest is good...I know I have a bitch of a time fixing stuff even when I know its not right though. I call it the "roses are red, voilets are blue" syndrome when I get caught in it,lol. Actually the first short one seems to integrate with the second, maybe you could work them together for a new first stanza.

 

the first [hikau] was written for my baba [grandmother], and the ;last bit was written for a girl, so it would kinda deviate from the meaning if i melded them together...but ya, if it wasn't for that, i could so do it...thanks

 

well, that came to me because they were both about good thoughts

For thoughts may be all we have, in the time of gloom

 

inspired by the poem read in Talisman by the Guess Who

I live only to die
I die only only to be with You
Your warm embrace wakes my corpse
From eternal slumber
That life leads to

 

Some miss love
Some mis friends
I miss me, I think I'm dead

My eyes can't see
My ears can't hear
My mouth can't taste
My skin can't feel
But there is nothing

Blackness, blends into nothing
Nothing into black
For all eternity, fading; shifting

Not by you, not by anyone
For myself is me, and I'm searching
But as much as search I do
I cannot move
Tranced, stuck in nothingness
Shifting to black
To nothingness


whjat is sad is i realized this is true...

 

A blanket that once covered
Now is away
One soul, shivering aone
Now, and forever

Two arms, looking for embrace
Only to find emptiness
The lone soul, lost in the snow
A blizzard of emotion, a mountain of pain

I see the clouds break
His llight shines from above
Catching those lost in the figid life
Of emptiness



there was a last stanza but i don't like it anymore
[O Lord, thank you
You saved my soul from the black
SAved, from empty and despair
I'm filled with Your love]


i really dont like that last one

 

i said id never post in here again, but im recanting that,,,ill post this one last one i wrote a long time ago...

A blanket that once covered
Now is away
One soul, shivering alone
Now and forever

Two arms, looking for embrace
Only to find emptyness
The lone soul, lost int he snow
A blizard of emotion, a storm of hurt

I see the clouds break
His light shines from above
Catching those lost in the frigid life
Of emptiness

O Lord, thank you
You saved my soul from the black
Saved, from the empty and despair
I'm filled with Your love


i don'y like some of the imagry, and i used "eptiness"/"empty" way, waaaayyyy, WAAAAYYYYYY too much




now im done