I read I mean man do I read like some literate jurassic boogie man stalking knoweledge from the shadows making prey on Emerson and Thereau and all that transcedentalt transcendentalism all that oneness and naturalism and the beat cats Ginsberg, and Kaufman and the rest of the gang led by Keriouc and the Dharmas and the sutras and all the Social Critisms of post industrialism Syrup and Schallenger and Einstein physics and Signs of life and all the lyrics of all the music that moves me from Ani to Buddy Guy and all that all that in between and all the this's and all the that's in quiet contemplation that I'm man's last vestige of intellectual isms' and when the world spurns and when the world burns well I'll be on the sidelines devising a plan saving man from man
Nice Nice vocab, I'm glad I checked this piece out, I liked the repeat with a change in a few words for emphasis, nice detail capturing effect, not much of a complete ryhme scheme but this piece doesn't need one, keep it up, I really really enjoyed this. btw nice vocab too. peace
Not too crazy about it, sorry. I like the idea, but way too much repetition. The only thing that really interested me in it was the last eight lines. Those were nice. But in the mean time, i would find a way to rearrange the latter lines by making them less boring. Just my opinion. I can be blunt, sorry about that! Hey but nothing against you man....I love you anyway! Just critiquing (sp) . So yeah. Peace!
