life, some sort of god-rejection.

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by unforgiven, May 22, 2004.

  1. unforgiven

    unforgiven Member

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    poison kiss, lick my lips,
    love your pain, feed my hurt
    play the game, kill my heart
    take my life, sell it used
    fucking hard, violent fuel.
    felt it gone, heard it scream
    open hole, die for free.
    bleeding empty, blood is black
    worthless life, desperate fuck.
    cut the razor, bleed me sick
    touch me silent, self defense.
    what do you think?
     
  2. VanAstral

    VanAstral Member

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    depressing!
     
  3. saffronfrancisburnet

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    angry..
    this is a hard focused poem
    but very honist about this painful fear.

    i hope this passes and you feel relieved soon

    great energy in this too.

    love n peace from saff
     
  4. ravenapples

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    That pretty much sums it up. (scarface accent ----->) Some tymes my friend ju gotda show does cock-ka-roashes how your roll.
    one question.
    What song best goes with your poem?
     
  5. sunflowerAlys

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    geez

    powerful
     
  6. unforgiven

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    nine inch nails, "somewhat damaged" is the song i was listening to as i wrote it, so i guess it would be that..
     
  7. roly

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    thats pretty angry....great writing....please try happiness as a subject! ur a great writer tho!
     

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