If I could borrow a moment of your time.

Discussion in 'Random Thoughts' started by Captain Cannabis, Feb 15, 2009.

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  1. Hello all you RT'ers.

    I'd like to share with you a song I've been working on... Well mainly just the guitar solo but anyway I've been looking for some constructive criticism or however it's spelled.


    The working title for this song is Promise of Deceit.

    Please take into consideration that this is the first guitar solo that I've ever written. I just wanna know what the general public thinks about my music. I know not everyone in the world is going to like Metal but thats why I want to get a broader audience to listen to my music.

    The important thing I would like to know is if that the solo sounds like a good solo, not if you like the song perhaps but does the solo sound like you would need a certain level of skill to play it.

    Thank you if you take your time to listen to this. :cheers2:
  2. By the way the drums are a program on my computer (if couldn't already tell) that allow you to play on the keyboard. It's pretty fun to just sit there and mess around on them.
  3. Xac

    Xac Visitor

    Cheers, i might actually steal some of that for my music.
  4. zen_arcade

    zen_arcade Banned

  5. SpacemanSpiff

    SpacemanSpiff Members

    Liqour and Whores......and spellcheck
  6. This thread isn't about Liqour & Whores and drunk trailer park supervisors. It's about the music maaaaan.
  7. SpacemanSpiff

    SpacemanSpiff Members

    lol...misspelled again
  8. Ohhh shit. Now I get whats wrong.
  9. SpacemanSpiff

    SpacemanSpiff Members

  10. yeah i know, as soon as i get mic's for my real drums it will be much much better.
  11. BraveSirRubin

    BraveSirRubin Members

    Slightly stereotypical, but not bad if that's what you're going for.
  12. Thats all I'm asking for! lol

    Now that I'm high it sounds even better, it's gonna be fun as fuck playing in front of people.
  13. stinkfoot

    stinkfoot truth

    Well done Captain.
  14. Thanks Stink.
  15. Jaitaiyai

    Jaitaiyai Cianpo di tutti capi

    One question, are you planning to give this moment of time back?

    The solos alright, interesting to see the rest of the song.
  16. HushBull

    HushBull Insuperior

  17. RandomOne

    RandomOne Member

    i think it fits the music style, a bit to repetitive in parts for me but not bad
  18. Here are the lyrics so far

    Promise of deceit it is the truth you'll never find
    Cast Away your anger, and open up your mind

    Throw away the dagger that you shove inside your brain
    Rob you of your soul, I'll make you lose at your own game

    Look into the mirror and tell me what you see
    You think you see a white line but it's really only me

    Stealing thunder, blacking light, you thought you had a chance
    Take another, get your fix, your stuck inside my trance

    Only Lies

    It is the Promise of Deceit
    It is killing the elite
    It is the Promise of Deceit
    And now it's you it will defeat

    Taking life and stealing dreams it rapes you of your thoughts
    Deprive you of your future and lessons to be taught

    The day is over, night is young, the stories growing old
    Without your mask you can't go on 'cause life it just too cold

    Times are desperate so's your need it's time to say goodbye
    Torn away by evil, you get that one last high

    You made the choice it wasn't right it's time to pay the price
    If you can still hear me, it's time to roll the dice

    Only Lies
    How I despise

    It is the Promise of Deceit
    It is Killing all the weak
    It is the Promise of Deceit
    And now it's too late to retreat

    (A third verse will go here but it hasn't been written yet)

    It's what I do
    I'm Killing you

    It is the Promise Of Deceit and it's me telling the lie
    It is the Promise of Deceit and now it's time to diiiieeee!!!!!

    It is the Promise of Deceit!!!
  19. BraveSirRubin

    BraveSirRubin Members

    Those lyrics are way too thrash for their own good.
  20. Now I just need to learn how to play guitar and sing at the same time...
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