If I could borrow a moment of your time.

Hello all you RT'ers.

I'd like to share with you a song I've been working on... Well mainly just the guitar solo but anyway I've been looking for some constructive criticism or however it's spelled.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M74au8DhJIg

The working title for this song is Promise of Deceit.

Please take into consideration that this is the first guitar solo that I've ever written. I just wanna know what the general public thinks about my music. I know not everyone in the world is going to like Metal but thats why I want to get a broader audience to listen to my music.

The important thing I would like to know is if that the solo sounds like a good solo, not if you like the song perhaps but does the solo sound like you would need a certain level of skill to play it.

Thank you if you take your time to listen to this. :cheers2:

 

By the way the drums are a program on my computer (if couldn't already tell) that allow you to play on the keyboard. It's pretty fun to just sit there and mess around on them.

 

Cheers, i might actually steal some of that for my music.

 

Hmm.

 

Liqour and Whores......and spellcheck

 

This thread isn't about Liqour & Whores and drunk trailer park supervisors. It's about the music maaaaan.

 

lol...misspelled again

 

Ohhh shit. Now I get whats wrong.

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q0klKQ1DRh4&feature=channel_page

^^This was better but those drums sound like a 2 year old beating on my favorite Kraft dinner cooking pot

 

yeah i know, as soon as i get mic's for my real drums it will be much much better.

 

Slightly stereotypical, but not bad if that's what you're going for.

 

Thats all I'm asking for! lol

Now that I'm high it sounds even better, it's gonna be fun as fuck playing in front of people.

 

Well done Captain.

 

Thanks Stink.

 

One question, are you planning to give this moment of time back?

The solos alright, interesting to see the rest of the song.

 

meh.

 

i think it fits the music style, a bit to repetitive in parts for me but not bad

 

Here are the lyrics so far

Promise of deceit it is the truth you'll never find
Cast Away your anger, and open up your mind

Throw away the dagger that you shove inside your brain
Rob you of your soul, I'll make you lose at your own game

Look into the mirror and tell me what you see
You think you see a white line but it's really only me

Stealing thunder, blacking light, you thought you had a chance
Take another, get your fix, your stuck inside my trance

Deception!!!
Only Lies
Deception!!!
Hypnotize

It is the Promise of Deceit
It is killing the elite
It is the Promise of Deceit
And now it's you it will defeat

Taking life and stealing dreams it rapes you of your thoughts
Deprive you of your future and lessons to be taught

The day is over, night is young, the stories growing old
Without your mask you can't go on 'cause life it just too cold

Times are desperate so's your need it's time to say goodbye
Torn away by evil, you get that one last high

You made the choice it wasn't right it's time to pay the price
If you can still hear me, it's time to roll the dice

Deception!!!
Only Lies
Deception!!!
How I despise

It is the Promise of Deceit
It is Killing all the weak
It is the Promise of Deceit
And now it's too late to retreat

(A third verse will go here but it hasn't been written yet)

Deception!!!
It's what I do
Deception!!!
I'm Killing you

It is the Promise Of Deceit and it's me telling the lie
It is the Promise of Deceit and now it's time to diiiieeee!!!!!

It is the Promise of Deceit!!!
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Those lyrics are way too thrash for their own good.

 

Now I just need to learn how to play guitar and sing at the same time...