I don't regret not writing love poems

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ripple23, Dec 30, 2004.

  1. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

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    and sometimes the winter is the
    hollow in my voice
    or the sound of a cat's, perhaps,
    footsteps in the hall
    if the hall can imagine itself
    as a silence with great
    green eyes, landscape eyes,
    eyes that are both sun and moon

    i can wait until two.

    and sometimes the winter divides a body,
    leaving 26 unintentional myths
    and the echo of crows in the blue distance.
     
  2. MindxSmoke

    MindxSmoke Member

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    brilliant. Your a good writer.
     
  3. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

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    *bows slightly*
     
  4. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    that was fantastic... excellent movement from line to line, with wonderful shifting of images, and good use of repetition. I thoroughly enjoyed this, and:

    what a perfect ending! very nicely done!

    :)
     
  5. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    great rhythm and your cat images haunt me now.....
     
  6. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

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    hell yeah, i use to hate cats until a week ago....
     
  7. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    lol...and why the change of heart!!?
     
  8. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

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    well, you know, they're poets... baudelaire loved cats
     
  9. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    hear hear
     
  10. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    ~* wonderful! I really can't say anything that hasn't been said already, I did like the way you ended it*~
     
  11. wideyed

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    i was wondering about the number 26.. i cant make up my own reason for your choosing it.. feel like explaining?
     

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