Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Fierce_Flawless, May 9, 2004.

  1. Fierce_Flawless

    Fierce_Flawless Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

    it's a point

    of an undetermined size
    and an undetermined shape
    just careening past
    through sense and space

    the point where you realise
    there are no mistakes
    no fears once all borders have desolved
    no questions beyond what you believed
    and who you loved

    the point where it comes to light
    that every last one of us
    fought the good fight

    the point


    between right and wrong
    motion and emotion


    and song

    where you finally understand
    where it all comes clear
    that we are not released in death
    we are translated

    we are all the colors of the spectrum
    within us somewhere now
    the end is not a rainbow
    it's not a new beginning
    it's the same old beginning
    we've been living
    all along
  2. VanAstral

    VanAstral Member

    ooh, tops!
  3. know1nozme

    know1nozme High Plains Drifter

    This really speaks to me.

    I'd like to say that it is really great work (I think it is), but I have too little experience critiquing poetry to know anything more than what I find beautiful or what something says to me. This, I find beautiful.

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