a new one i wrote today at the doctors office. its just a draft and theres plenty more work to be done to it a young sun awakens with the rooster winds sway the willow's weep blue waves tease the shore morning drums beat scents fill the air critters scale veteran trees vibrations shake the meadow the buzz of bumblebees clouds cry afternoon lays its scene rain dances on roses petals 'tis peaceful and serene sunset dreams begin to paint the big star yawns sliding behind Valley mountains forever rising again at dawn
Hey, this is pretty good! I found myself liking a line or two out each stanza. I think your first stanza was my favorite wholistically. Then in second stanza, I liked "critters scale veteran trees"....good draft!!
