Couple of things I wrote. Comment please?

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by -Bev-, May 20, 2007.

  1. -Bev-

    -Bev- Member

    Locked Inside
    She turns, twists hair,
    In frustration, sighs
    Head in hands, with ink,
    She tries
    To free what's inside
    On to paper
    The essence of her soul,
    what shapes her.

    Surfing the Soundwaves...
    Surfing the soundwaves
    In a maze of melody
    In a turmoil of tune
    With a rhythm of ruin.
    With a landslide of lyrics
    And a bassline of bliss
    I drift in the music
    As it leaves its sweet kiss.

    Hopeful Lies
    Hazy Sunshine
    Pink Skies
    Broken Looks
    Dreamy Eyes
    Rainy Streets
    Haunting Dreams
    Dizzy Fears
    Hopeful Lies
     
  2. Miss_Beatle

    Miss_Beatle Beatlemaniac

    I like them all =]
    I really like surfing the soundwaves, that one's really good.
     
  3. -Bev-

    -Bev- Member

    thanks! :]
     
  4. shovel250

    shovel250 Member

    surfing the soundwaves is the best one,the other ones r really good too
     
  5. brertom

    brertom Member

    soundwaves one is sick
     
  6. -Bev-

    -Bev- Member

    sick as in good.. i hope.. ? :p
    thanks guys.
     
  7. A.B.E.

    A.B.E. Member

    I really like your style, and liked all three, especially the first two. You have a good pace to your lines, and they are good to read aloud. They seem very personal and thoughtful. Yeah ! Good work! Makes me want to write more poetry, it really puts me in a mood.
     

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