beige universe

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Fierce_Flawless, Jun 2, 2004.

  1. Fierce_Flawless

    Fierce_Flawless Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    there's one little eyeball
    floating on a vast empty sea
    one little eyeball
    looking
    for what it might see
    and who were you?
    and what is me?
    if we're just looking
    for nothing in particular
    and finding nothing
    but colors
    that add up to a common color
    who is you
    and what is me?
    what is me?
     
  2. InTheFlesh

    InTheFlesh Member

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    It makes me think of how insignificant we are to the universe. We are always looking for awnsers to the un-neccesary questions.
     
  3. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    its certainly interesting, i dont know about the last three lines, i understand the need for them to be their, im just unsure about the wording


    but all over good!
     
  4. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    The eyeball is creepy... bobbing along...bobbing along...
     
  5. sunflowerAlys

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    that one sounds like a poem it does :)
     

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