As told by yan

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Pablo, May 25, 2004.

  1. Pablo

    Pablo Member

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    in this world------
    Each human spends------------

    their life An engineer of fate---------------
    Each thing that------lives dies----------------
    Everything dead was once alive---------------
    Each human spends their life---------------------
    A negotiator of destiny, Fear ---------------------
    that a higher Power lives--------------------------
    Inspires destruction------------------------------
    Fear that it does not-------------exist-----------
    Inspires creation-------------but-----------
    Only being safe----------------------
    Unafraid to---------------
    Live, inspires love











     
  2. VanAstral

    VanAstral Member

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    oh my, very nice!
     
  3. Pablo

    Pablo Member

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    Thanks VanAstral
     
  4. Aditi

    Aditi Member

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    yes -- like this much!
     
  5. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    very expressive!
     
  6. roly

    roly Senior Member

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    is it only me thats impressed by the yin yang and the aesthetically pleasing layout of this fine poem?
     
  7. littleskinny

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    hell no roly, that's the best bit!


    Sorry I haven't commented before now. I really like the shape and structure...a lot of effort there
     
  8. Pablo

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    Thank you all, im surprised at what a positive response this poem is getting. Its a fairly simple messege. Glad you enjoy it.
     
  9. SvgGrdnBeauty

    SvgGrdnBeauty only connect

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    I love it :) Esp. the yin yang...and I usually find concrete poems cheesy...but that was extremely well done...
     
  10. helen-maple

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    it can be the most simplistic of messages that can be the most profound.
    and touching.
    because getting to the core, everything becomes simplified.no,?

    yes, this may be the best ive read from you.
    you hit that spot that was looking to be recognized
     
  11. NightOwl1331

    NightOwl1331 Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    Beautiful! :)
     

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