animism free verse

Discussion in 'Animism' started by bradofcentralpa, May 8, 2004.

  1. bradofcentralpa

    bradofcentralpa Member

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    i apoligize it took the form of a shitey poem, but sometimes easier, however pretensious seeming:

    Is that old impassive rock not alive?
    Could it have tricked its mind into believing it wills my path obstructed by its weight?
    Could I not be a boulder's hands, moving other boulders at its commands?
    My hand surely is not alive--
    But would I ask it?
    And when it answer--for an answer, positive or negative, is always there-- would i believe it? would I believe that it answered?
    I have tricked myself into believing my brain enslaves my body when a dialogue exists between all parts.
    I do hope, for his sake, that my friend, the rock has no delusions of grandeur...that he controls the wind which dries his flesh, or the river moves his earthen legs;
    And I hope the same for myself.
     
  2. themnax

    themnax Senior Member

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    hey that was fun

    and please don't call your efforts "shitty"
    we are all too fallable to relyably judge ourselves
     
  3. honeyhannah

    honeyhannah herbuhslovuh

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    I didn't think it was shitty at all.

    I really enjoyed it.
     
  4. fractalated

    fractalated Member

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    hey that was really cool :)
     
  5. Applespark

    Applespark Ingredients:*Sugar*

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    beautiful;)
     
  6. bradofcentralpa

    bradofcentralpa Member

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    thanks...i thought nobody would ever reply
     
  7. Tamee

    Tamee naked

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    liked it..........
     
  8. mikopanic

    mikopanic Member

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    i think it is important that nobody has delusions of grandeur
     
  9. cerridwen

    cerridwen in stitches

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    interesting...
     
  10. 2cool

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    Pretty cool. I liked it. TY 4 posting.
     

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