I really need some feedback on a song I wrote. How am I Supposed to go one more step When I am so confused? How am I Supposed to go one more mile When it's a game I'm bound to lose? I'm trapped in a corner There's nobody else but me. It's all the same Crying all the night to ease the pain How much longer now? 'Cause burning low is my immortal flame Is it really eternal? I just want to feel the rain Can they here me when I'm so far down here? They tell me that I've got to let go I fell they're never seeing through my eyes Sometimes it's what they say When they think I'm so far away Living in a dream Far from reality. Well, I had a dream That the reflection in the mirror wasn't me But someone more flawless. Why can't it be true? Why are some things far too perfect to be true? Where I'm at there's nowhere to go My love for this is more than you'll ever know The memory of some hopeful day They tell me that I'm living for lies "There's gotta be more to life" But I'm alright. Their broken hearts Crumble 'cause they lost their second chance Some people get no chance at all. They walk away Some things just seem to multiply the pain. I know life ain't easy to live I know it's all that life's got to give I wish you remembered me still But why be left broken by a hope? It's hard becase you gave me mine Can you tell me what life means? Alone by the sea Loss creates a different side of me When last words are spoken. Footprints fade But those made into the sands of time Survive. With every loss there's something to gain The sun will come to take away the rain Let memories suffice for the pain When you wanna lay down and die Or break down and cry Think of all that's passed you by In life... I tell you, I don't want to let go. Why can't you see through my eyes? Did you know that sometimes I cry For freedom from supression Before I die... How am I Supposed to go one more step When I am so confused? How am I Supposed to go one more mile When it's a game I'm bound to lose? I'm trapped in a corner There's nobody else but me. -Rani Lee Taylor, future rock star Thanks for your time, if I could have some feedback that would be aweosme
it's a nice poem.....but a nice poem don't make necessarily a good rock song' lyrics..... Anyway, i've no doubt you are a future rock star......
Yep, I've got it all worked out, I just have no idea how to put music on the computer. If i ever find out I'll do it
there is an cream song very simular to yours called who am I-check it out at rock hall of fame-or lyrics.com