A longer poem...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by -Bev-, May 27, 2007.

  1. -Bev-

    -Bev- Member

    I'm really not sure about this one.. but please comment and tell me what you think anyways :]

    Rainy Spring days
    Melted into a haze
    A drizzle of thrills
    Splashed with puddles of hope.
    Awash with your apathy
    Me, flooded with fear
    Frozen words on my tongue
    Couldn't speak,
    It was clear.
    Drenched in this love
    That had seized me so fast
    Memories of moments
    I longed for to last.
    My heart would stop beating
    One look from those eyes
    A rainbow of emotion
    Beneath dull grey skies.
    ****************
    Purple clouds, Summer nights
    Blurred happiness, tears
    Hazy dreams, hopeful words
    Sweet music to ears
    Confusion, cruel games
    'Til my heart would break
    Never could know
    What was real, what was fake.
    The sunshine faded
    All hope washed away
    Too late, spoke the words
    I'd always wanted to say.
    Cloudburst of hurt,
    Torrent of pain
    And one look from those eyes
    Brings it all back again.
     
  2. Riggs

    Riggs Banned

    That was good.
     
  3. Lorna

    Lorna The Magician

    Oh God! this poem is so much real for me, so much echoing in me, it is what i feel.

    So good to hear, so good to read and feel.

    Very good bev.
     
  4. VanAstral

    VanAstral Member

    I agree with Mel Gibson!
     
  5. Miss_Beatle

    Miss_Beatle Beatlemaniac

    I like it a lot!! Good job =]
     
  6. -Bev-

    -Bev- Member

    Thanks!
     

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