Good work! Looking forward to seeing more.
I really love the flow of this poem. The only things I see that could be changed are: Maybe a different word instead of 'kindred' since it is...
My inspiration for this one was the relationship (or lack thereof) I have with my biological mother. Thanks for the kind words, everyone. :)
I *think* this is about religion... it speaks of guilt, innocence lost, promises of salvation unmet. Did I get it? LOL..
Your poems make me feel all fluttery.. :blush: Look forward to seeing more!
Comments welcome... :)
Thanks. And I agree.. but conforming was never my thing, y'know? =)
I have another story to add! This one happened over the weekend... I ordered eggplant parmesan at a restaurant. It came with a side of 'spaghetti...
Ah, thanks for the quick reply! You're right about the last line.. it's more an afterthought than a part of the poem. This was actually an e-mail...
You can make nearly any meal vegetarian, just get creative.. I love to make stir-fries, with tofu or without.. any pasta can be made vegetarian,...
You made me to be at once Your burden and your convenience And you were never mine as much as I am yours Muffled midnight sobs and years of...
Fourteen hours is an eternity and seven miles is an ocean whose waves of discontent crash on both shores, but you ride those waves with your...
Watch for grammar and punctuation... Something I noticed... You go into vivid detail when describing piercings, but you don't do much to describe...
Your father can't force you to eat meat... just tell them you're not very hungry, then when you get home sneak into the fridge for some veggies.....
By eating ONLY vegetables, fruits, and grains, you are consuming less than if you were to eat an animal who also ate vegetable, fruits, and...
Yesterday DH and I went to our favorite hole-in-the-wall burrito place and instead of my usual (egg, potato, onion, cheese) I decided to get an...
LOL. These sound like every stoned conversation I've ever heard, but it works. It's funny. This would make a decent film, shot in black and white...
Huge kudos. You've got a definite gift. Please share this with someone you know IRL.. a teacher, friend, someone.Your talent is too great to keep...
Great imagery in this.. it's so simple, but it has a definite beat. Like pp said I can see it to music. Nice work :)
Heh, I was thinking the same thing. I think every fast food place should offer a veggie burger. Also, it irks me that the veg. burgers come...
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