ah. well, that isn't extremely clear in the poem, anyways. All you said is "destined to come undone" which is pretty ambiguous. Still a good...
I liked it too, i for one agree with the sentiment, don't see how anyone could disagree. Could one really think it's better to sleep, or break...
hmm. maybe I should swap places, the second and third stanza?
Free as the Wind How much like the air are we human souls so like the force that bends the pines and sets them whistling in the dark, we can...
i'm bored, it's late and raining. a friend had a baby, a life. i have nothing but these depressed and drunken feelings I'm getting old, 23 I'm...
I'm sure this "hello" person would be happy that her long-ago thought stream was still being read by others. Not the best poem ever, but since I'm...
Maybe he's drowning in the bounty of life? He's going with the flow so well he's lost in it, very nice. Either way, this is a hell of a poem dude,...
No offense, but that's about as ironic as the fact that black is the opposite of white. I liked this poem, but there's no irony...perhaps you...
i sat, a lotus on the lawn but all i could do is blink and yawn peace of mind would not be mine but peace in sleep would work just fine
Beautiful yet sad. nice one man :)
everyone and their brother is moving to Florida these days. t'is a shame, for you especially to trade CA for FL...
good shit man. I especially like the image of the water annointing every bend of the river...though the whole ending was beautiful :) I think...
(stalk, i thought you lived in CA?) plans change, people change; I wonder where the old ones go...
pretty good man, i can relate to what you're saying; when I discovered my own beliefs on the subject, rather than just accepting imposed beliefs,...
well, she's a friend of mine, so i have a bit more than just someone i saw, haha. Though it's true that I didn't state that anywhere, so the...
I like it man, the last lines are pretty moving. Focus on the Void, for it is the source of the All. :)
Your poetry challenges me in some way I can't describe. It is work to read it, but a pleasure as well, like a job well done. I'm happy you posted...
I'll admit it; I don't really get it.
Molly, I don't think you'd like most of my poetry then, haha. I tend to write more introspective stuff, or nature stuff. I don't feel a lot of...
I like it a lot, except for the way you spaced out the last few lines. it doesn't fit the rest of the poem.
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