Night Recalls =begin tape= Brazil sits(legs like trunks unfolded), her waist um staring at the stage. I purse my Lips like ready clay that reels...
Uninvited Partyguest Internally sucked like a fishhound i wait by the shoulders of impeccable suits, with their corporate boulders and foun-tain...
good stuff! Keep writing
woah! *stands with mouth open* this poem is so bruised and fragile the character you're writing as....wowser....this is the most powerful piece...
hey clockwork orange just browsing over lots of poems at the mo! Liking this piece. there's something about the 1st stanza i quite like...the...
:D this is beautiful the descriptiveness of wow..just the storyline and image you created. it's hard to make words move...ya know?
oooo racy....quirky...nice word choices
wow, um...
nice, thanks for posting. not heard it before though...
Wow, this is good! It's true as well. Nostalgia...we do live on memories and society. I don't personally think it needs anything else, but that's...
i love the sounds of the words in sandbox james. can we hear the songs sometime? i'd love to hear 'em!
You like rhymes don't you? Interesting poem man...has it got any story behind it?
ooo liking this :D quirky
good use of similes and prose style is strong. Nice that you wrote about stuff you know and feel. It's easier to write meaningful things that way....
hey again marquis, how's it going? this piece feels like a romantic moment where both individuals are taken aback by the intensity and the buzz
This sounds like music lyrics to me by the repetition. nice though whatever it may be:) imagery and...such stuff.....tis good!
this is lovely...
*smiles* yet another good piece svg
Gazooks time flies by the winter hole as The Rabbit procrastinates his emphibatic clock that tick tock ticks, away alice runs past who's alice?...
Internally sucked like a fishhound i wait by the shoulders of impeccable suits, with their corporate boulders and foun-tain pennnnns.... Gah...
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