red...for "Hide and Seek," i had liked the return to Daddy's Sweetpea as well, but ultimately i have decided that there is no return, that little...
Chicago's Baby Girl (part 2) *for Lonniyah Nakita Jackson, born 1/24/08 Rest your head on my heart as it's beating writes this lullaby:...
thank you bob...do come again some time! coming soon: revisions! of select poems and also my short story, which i am trying to get published so...
ok stagnant pool...maybe this will get you stirred to write something! try this metaphor exercise: (write these freely now, dont think too hard...
and when will you be posting someting new??!
of your most recent stuff, "turning" is my favorite. i like the way the images connect in this one. i like that you've been focusing more on...
wow how sensual. "archana" is a great haiku...if you're like myself and believe that a haiku doesn't need structure "still born" is an amazing...
Hi tama...i remember your name...i'm with bhaskar here, i like the beginning quite a bit
i liked all but the ending stanza. the first three say so much, they are so laced with your emotions, then the last one feels like an after...
these are the best parts of the poem! i liked the movement in these parts, the social conscience...
i really liked this...i felt there were a few images/lines out of place, like "blind people feed us, but there is nothing left to feed," i didnt...
i have to agree with red here, i was getting all caught up in this stormy seas, erotic imagery, then i was thrown into the trees, then i was on a...
blurb... (untitled & unedited) He was the moon tugging on her tides, and he was her ocean's undertow. He was gravity, and she was the sky, her...
sylvan...thanks for commenting on my short story, hopefully you find it intriguing enough to finish it! i would love to hear your opinions on it...
wow red, thanks for taking the time with this! uhm...the moon boots and wool overcoat: literally, when i used to play hide and seek with dad,...
"Secrets Under the Acorn's Cap," a short fiction story was here...i posted revisions outside in the writer's forum if you're interested...
thanks everyone, you're all too nice! please tell me when something's not working though...i'm trying to get better at writing...
thanks guys, as always your comments are appreciated! and yeah...that original version of "like drowning" had no focus yet, i tend to do that a...
^^here red...something new for you! one of the pieces from my workshop...
Hide and Seek When I was Daddy's Sweetpea, still blooming, and mustache-prickle kisses tasted like English toffee and Swisher Sweets, we went on...
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