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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ladygodivasoperation, Oct 19, 2004.

  1. ladygodivasoperation

    ladygodivasoperation Member

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    If it couldn't wait till tomorrow,
    Could it be worth it today?
    And if all it brings me's sorrow,
    would it help if I threw it away?
    Maybe jesus could be my friend,
    and keep me warm in the cold night.
    Just can't let it happen
    'cause this time it's worth the fight.
    I'm affraid,
    cause never's such a long time.
    I don't want to wait.
    I want you now.
     
  2. ryupower

    ryupower NO capcom included

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    hmm...the endings pretty fast.....maybe make it a little longer? But I like the Idea, really nice! :)
     
  3. kidder

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    I'd start the poem fresh and use the last two lines as your first. I like their assertiveness and the verbal grip they have.
     
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