for peace....what ever we vision what may be done ,is not yet known for paths unbroken,no land free. we send a messege,the golden ray. with passion life flavours new. ive washed my temper,emptied my soul to swim free,waves on the tides. with a cloud of salted taste, no words of freedom ,mouth embraced...... tied to the past ,death foul smell. visions of many considered living .. we spoke of love ,a globe a garden choose the friut ,but becareful. ive gone so far,between states.... seen ripples pass ,forgiven mistakes. now comes a time,to view yourself. what devil thoughts ,invade this head. cast an eye the inner one, how? we let so much, be destroyed... go blindly now, it is done... the paths for many,the paths ive run run, to crawling.... thank you for reading love n peace from saff i found a whirl of light inside from this i wrote for all to read.... know yourself ...then others will too.
Thanks for posting this Saff it was a lovely read, some stunning parts, and had a powerful, sad undertone...a warning.... These parts really stood out for me, especially the ending:
thank you for reading this piece its all within.... for you little skinny............ for once alone i stand, to view my self. what shall i whisper to the ear? to stare once before the moment.. has gone.. be whole now, for ever onwards unto life alone we stand ,. join now the moments form this shape not broken just misplaced.... we see the warnings so aware. to choose ourselves ,maybe alone. a smile from another will share. love n peace to you from saff
Love and peace right back at ya!! That was beautiful - thank you. I hope others get round to reading your original piece - they need to !
I second skinny's comments.... a good strong piece from you with a subtle warning. The second stanza is where it really took off, for me... and your flow was fantastic... thanks for sharing
