What do you think?

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by happyhippiegrl, Aug 26, 2005.

  1. happyhippiegrl

    happyhippiegrl Member

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    Hey all, I just wrote this poem that I wrote about someone who has kind of dropped me from his life. Its kind of closure, and I'm thinking about sending it to him. Do you think I should or not? The deal with him is he always comes to me when he is down and out, has no else, and acts like he loves me so much. Basiclly says all the things I want to hear. I always fall for it and give in and take care of him again. This time though I realize it more than I ever did how he uses me and I just felt I needed to express it.


    I use to see a soul so deep
    A person I would always keep
    A laugh with you could brighten the sky
    A tear on your cheek and inside I'd cry

    I wanted to take all your pain away
    Make you well, so you would stay
    Show you love that you've never known
    Save your sanity and bring you home

    For years I refused to let this be
    I faught and faught, until recently
    In the dust of all that was good
    The truth was lurking, which I misunderstood

    There was something that you wanted from me
    It wasn't love, friendship or company
    It was a dollar spent here and there
    A place to sleep and someone to care

    As time went by I saw the real you
    I held on hoping it wasn't true
    The longer and further we drifted apart
    The clearer it was to see in your heart

    Now I know I was never there
    Easily exhaled by you, like the air
    I get it now so don't you fear
    From me, you will no longer hear
     
  2. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    ouchness. i don't know whether you should send this or not but you should let him know how you feel.
     
  3. happyhippiegrl

    happyhippiegrl Member

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    yea, your probably right I slept on it and I've kind of simmered down
     
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