War

War:
nation aginst nation
man agintst man
over what?
oil,mony,greed?

War:
parents holding there dead children
cheldren dreanched in blood
over what?
oil,mony,greed?

you can spend your life
trying to figure out why
meanwhille burnt half dead children cry
what do u mean why!
any fool can see
that this war will just cause misery
and this war just isent ment to be.



positive and negitve feedback welcome
thanx

 

I think to write on a topic like war is rad...there is so much emotion connected with it...Keep On Writing....Rock on man

Peace n` Love

 

*tear* nice poem

 

There are alot of grammatical and spelling errors that makes the poem look unproffesional. Also, it didn't tell me anything new, you're repeating ideas.

 

It is the poem of a young person it is the point that it came from a young impressionable person that matters

 

But if that person wants to become a better poet and hope to have their work to be taken seriously, they need to watch the grammar and spelling.

 

as if you can'ttell what he's trying to say give em a break nobody is perfect

 

This isn't about being perfect this is about being mature and serious about your work. Spelling mistakes tend to just discredit the substance.

 

Poetry is art and art is imperfect and beautiful in it's own way.

 

Oh please....... :H

Gime me a break.

If you like the art of spelling mistakes and crap grammar so be it.

 

Your very rude. So be it

 

Here have a lollipop.