speechless

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Sirius, Mar 21, 2007.

  1. Sirius

    Sirius Member

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    I feel the words in my mouth
    building up and uncomfortable
    gritty like chewing on sand
    that won't wash out.
    The connection is lost from my brain to my pen,
    trying to get these words on paper.
    They are caught in between
    where they barely are seen,
    and never properly remembered.
    If I could only explain myself out loud,
    I would not have to live in this silence.
     
  2. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    i feel you. hang in there, it will all come out. good piece.
     
  3. feralfey

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    Yeah, that happens. I agree with skyfire. You deserve a lot of credit, though. You expressed the experience and emotions very eloquently.
     
  4. Icurus

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    This was very well written, and one can tell it's a real
    part of the writers daily routine, like being the first to
    run into an ET and have to come up with the sounds,
    the words one understand's, and respond to those neccssary
    needs accordingly, only it sounds maybe the words are correct,
    the problem may stem from the listener.........

    Very nice read, great expression,
    Thanks ~
    Devon Knight ~
     
  5. Sirius

    Sirius Member

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    Thankyou guys for taking the time to write your opinions. It means alot that someome is just listening. Thanks!!!!
     
  6. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    I really connected with this line "The connection is lost from my brain to my pen," heh. Well said!
     
  7. Sirius

    Sirius Member

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    thanks man
     
  8. Miss_Beatle

    Miss_Beatle Beatlemaniac

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    I loved it! Great poem!
     
  9. Sirius

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    Thankyopu ever so much Miss Beatle!
     
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