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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by sunflowerAlys, Sep 30, 2004.

  1. sunflowerAlys

    sunflowerAlys Member

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    Hours spent lip-locked:
    A wonderfully apathetic past-time
    Like staring at the sky-
    I loved it

    Draped and kept
    Between cool dirty sheets
    The ripples our ripples
    And our direction of plan

    Nudge me once and we'll be flying
    falling
    Puck on ice
    Madly thin

    All the same you don't see the water

    Since then, crumbs in bed
    Is a comfertable go-between
    You always look the same on both sides of a kiss
     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    What an opener, and a great piece overall.... great images that wouldn't normally seem related to the topic work fantastically here. a strong showing; thanks for sharing :)
     
  3. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    wow, this is really goood!!! i like it!!! :D
     
  4. sunflowerAlys

    sunflowerAlys Member

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    thanx fer yer comments guyes. i dont write so immeadiately any more i dont know why but...any more for anymore???
     
  5. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Mmmmmmm....that was melancholic and romantic at the same time. Great blend, sent my mind spiriling into my own thoughts.
     
  6. Jaz Delorean

    Jaz Delorean Senior Member

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    that is very, very good. it's also very beautiful and kind of fragile.

    thank you for sharing it.
    yeah lets have some more!!
    Jaz
     
  7. sunflowerAlys

    sunflowerAlys Member

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    yowzers thanx to yall for all the encouragement you dudes rock especially the one who appears to have blue hair :)
     

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