Pink and Jagged

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by sunflowerAlys, Oct 21, 2004.

  1. sunflowerAlys

    sunflowerAlys Member

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    How come great things only happen when I'm not in the mood?
    The last time I was here there was a revolution
    Now there's old yellow paint on my elbows
    And photographers running to catch the bus
    I don't know the meaning to half of those.
    But there's pink clouds in the sky
    And a moon half full
    And the city before me looks functional
    There's a strange kind of frantic stillnes
    Purple and bruised
    And flowers blossomong out of my armpits.

    You say I only write for myself
    You're true
    And your truth, it holds me like
    a towel after bath
    If I am an artist to you
    I'll smile
    The dust the wind blows knows I'll return home
    to a warm television
    Once the night here gets too crowded
    with figaments.

    And I love him still and i love him
    still
    I'm attempting on a jagged love song
    an abstract swan song.
     
  2. kidder

    kidder Member

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    'And your truth, it holds me like a towel after (a) bath' What a wonderful, tactile image!
    The first four lines contain fascinating observations and offer a reader promise. That's why we read ahead. Keep it up!
     
  3. dreamergirl

    dreamergirl Member

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    i don't know what to say other than i like it
     
  4. sunflowerAlys

    sunflowerAlys Member

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    thank you very much. i'm not so confident with this one. oooh now i have to go to school!
     
  5. littleskinny

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    *claps* I really enjoyed this one honey! Too many great moments to quote but I must repeat once more:

    "How come great things only happen when I'm not in the mood?
    The last time I was here there was a revolution
    Now there's old yellow paint on my elbows
    And photographers running to catch the bus"

    "The dust the wind blows knows I'll return home
    to a warm television"
     

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