People Always Leave...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by MelzDope, May 20, 2010.

  1. MelzDope

    MelzDope Member

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    People always leave,
    and I don't know if it's me/
    who's the reason for these missing identities,
    But let me see/
    What could it be-
    that stays eating the inside of me?
    I need to figure out this tragedy/
    Because I truly feel alone,
    Sometimes I think I'm pushing them away, so,
    I could stand on my own/
    Cuz I don't need them, let that be known,
    That's because I taught myself to be prone/
    to all the bullshit and the people who don't want to stick by my side,
    I'll be honest, when i'm alone, I swallow my pride/
    Some days, I even cried,
    thought that they'd be there forever - but they lied/
    Got me thinkin' so I had to decide,
    I needed to let my nostalgia subside/
    But the longer I played it off in reality, the more I denied,
    I was lyin to myself and it's somethin I couldn't hide/
    It showed - both on the outside and inside,
    and when that shows, they unintentionally watched slowly how my pride died/
    All I can say is that I tried,
    But burning bridges doesn't do any justice when you're tied/
     
  2. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    Wow. Really really good. It always seemed to me that this sorta poetry was dead, but you've given me hope =D
     
  3. spexxx

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    Pretty great. The rhyme scheme could be more snappier towards the middle/end but other than that the subject matter seemed very real. I like how it started off a lot. Awesome first post
     
  4. thedope

    thedope glad attention Lifetime Supporter

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    I'm curious where the sentiment goes from here.
     
  5. MelzDope

    MelzDope Member

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    Thanks guys. Really do appreciate it.
     
  6. Autumn's Angel

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    I've read this on at least three different occasions now, just browsing, and it's given me a different perspective each time... well written! I love it!
     
  7. MelzDope

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    Thanks so much. I'm glad you can see it in different perspectives and still seem to enjoy it. That means a lot!
     
  8. TipsyGypsy

    TipsyGypsy Light of a Fading Star

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    I like it. Easy to identify with at times.
     
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