here are the lyrics to a new song i wrote. You Can Always Let Me Down I don't intend to spark your flame, I'm frightened that I can, To chase me out the door, you see, you're not the better man, Start your pouting, stand up short, just take me as I'm not, You're wasting all your energy, for losing what you've got CHORUS I feel so unknown, you don't ever see, the thoughts in my head, where I want to be, call me crazy, let me know, I'll wear my humble crown, build my mileage up so high, you can always let me down Feelings overcome our words, and this I do not mind, but when it comes to seeing, my obsession, you are blind, conquering small soldiers, for the interests of the tall, what happens when a giant, has to take the biggest fall I feel so unknown..... Can't you contemplate around, this blunder you've matured, indentation in your guise, to this I am allured, You'll never stop your crying, for a petty drop of milk, but for a worm like you, it's losing carefully spun-silk I feel so unknown..... So will you walk on solid ground, or ride upon your star, either way you go, you know, I'll never be that far, I've got to tread along beside, no matter what you do, but when you see my face, just be acquainted, it's your cue I feel so unknown.....
truthfully, that song's already been done alot of times. sure it might not have the same lyrics, but its the kinda hting you hear on the radio all the time. work toward something more original.
i completely agree w/ the guy before it just lacks originality, and it makes you seem almost depthless. im not dissing you i do poems like that all the time. you have to add your own little spark. but your heart seems to be in the right place... i hoped i gelped (but prolly not) ---BATMAN---
