These are lyrics to a song I'm working on. Not my usual style of writing. Sounds a lot better than it reads, with the holding of notes and the like. Try to imagine it being sung in front of music. I'm still tweaking it a bit, it will be longer but if put into a song this is how long it would be. I'd really like some comments/criticism. Kaiser Kaiser sitting on his plastic throne, Spendin' his day screaming in the telephone, Can't waste his thoughts on his son back at home, He's a got a war to win, yeah he's got a war to win. Mr. Politician, blood it gets him high, His utopia of peace is nothing but a lie, He's been eaten by the evil, you can see it in his eyes, He's got a war to bleed, he's got a war to bleed, Sorry soldier harboring his suicidal thoughts, Can't be much to hack compared to all the men he's fought, But circling round are faces of the innocents he's shot, He's got a war to live, he's got a war to live Mr. Teacher, kindly, won't you tell me who to be? Why you givin' out so many orders, ain't you ever been free? Have you ever looked beyond the wall, for what you cannot see? You may not know, you may not care, but your war's as bad as theirs. Expendable people, with expendable lives, Everyone just keeps on livin' whether or not you survive, Merely a statistic, an easy sacrifice, Victory's the goal and sanity's the price. Oh little girl, I wanna drown, in your sheltered little pond, Don't you know the ocean frightens me, I ain't gonna make it there for long,
sounds better than it reads eh? seems that way, though i could see it through most just not in the teacher verse, that one interests me nice song, nice message(s)
Yeah, the verse with the teacher is what I'm mostly trying to fix... I want something that sounds good and gets the message across... guess I better consult the thesaurus, eh?
