i write alot feedback is sweet

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by SadieRain, Nov 5, 2005.

  1. SadieRain

    SadieRain Member

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    Its like a beautiful disaster thats never gonna end
    Its like that 1 night we spent together that went by so fast
    I spaced out so far away from you
    When I came back you were long gone
    Nothing left of you and me
    Only memories to fill the void
    Only anguish to fill the gap

    I'll keep looking baby Ill find it again
    Just give it time
    Just give me this
    Ill be here baby
    Ill catch you once again
    Ill save you once again
    Dont worry
    It will be ok
    Dont worry
    I still care
    __________________________________________________________


    There was this girl


    Who hung out in a alley or 2

    This girl

    She had nothing better to do


    Nothing to loose
    There was this girl

    Who had nothing left in this world

    This girl this girl

    She watched as world passed by

    She didn’t run after those dreams

    This is a girl

    With nothing left in her world


    She sat


    And watched all the chaos go


    And reflect everything that ever went wrong


    With a ciggarett in 1 hand and the pain of life burning inside


    This girl who had nothing left in this world


    She watched as the world passed by


    She didn’t run after those dreams


    This is a girl


    With nothing left in her world


    U cant get inside her head


    No one knows if what she’s thinking is what she says


    You can hear her breathing heavily


    You hear her crying


    This girl


    Who has nothing left in this world


    This girl


    With nothing left in her world

    ________________________________________________________________________

    She puts on make-up till her face becomes the color of the bottle she paints her nails even though thats not who she really is
    she doesnt understand y he doesnt see her like that she doesnt understand y she loves him

    She could be perfect she could make him happy she needs this she needs him He'll never know she never tell that he makes everything in her world well

    He will never no she stares when hes not looking she'll never understand y he doesnt stare back everyday she looks in the mirror wondering y he doesnt love her she asks herself everytime he walks by

    She could be perfect she could make him happy she needs this she needs him He'll never know she never tell that he makes everything in her world well




    I could be perfect i could make him happy i need this i need him and he will never know i will never tell that he makes everything in my world well again...

    (im such a helpless romantic)[​IMG]



     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    you've got quite a talent going on for only fifteen! the first was my favorite... seems like a scene that could be anywhere, with feelings so familiar expressed perfectly... good stuff; thanks for sharing! :)
     
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