dispose

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by dark_hippy, Jul 4, 2007.

  1. dark_hippy

    dark_hippy Member

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    i can't get her out of my life,
    believe me, i've tried.
    everything short of using a knife,
    cheated and lied.
    she won't leave,
    she won't go.
    i push with a heave,
    it's an emphatic "NO".
    i make her cry,
    push and shove.
    she tells me to try,
    her unbreakable love.
    she stands beside me,
    after all i've done.
    shows me what i couldn't see,
    makes me face pain over run.
    who could throw away something so real,
    like my beautiful wife.
    she reinvented the way i feel,
    i can't let her out of my life.
     
  2. CrystalShip

    CrystalShip Member

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    loved it! , i liked the last 4 lines the best.
    on a side not, you seem to be doing pretty well with the rhyming structure so far, but don't let it hold you back your imagination/emotion
     
  3. tarnishedangelmomma

    tarnishedangelmomma Member

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    AWWWW! Way to make your pregnant wife all teary eyed love!!
     
  4. children of korn

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    i love your poem
     
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