Devils Bit

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Man, I really like this. I like it when I'm being told a poetic story, and I enjoy it's dream-like setting. Very good descriptions. I enjoyed reading this very much

 

thanx very much psychedelic bones ... glad you enjoyed it ... i also prefer poetic story to prose or blank verse.

 

I like this one. It attempts to flow rather musically, but the flow could be smoothed with a little punctuation editing. For example:

Line 2: Of a woman I'd seen in a black-as-night cloak
Line 54: I felt weak, so alone, and afraid,

...just at a cursory glance.

Cheers,
CP

 

many thanx for your input

 

i really like that poem, its expressive

 

many thanx sweetheart ... luv your hair ... hare kirishna

 

thank you, i love my hair too! lol