color me black

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by rambleON, Jan 25, 2012.

  1. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    Meet in the middle of the air, seek me out in clouds
    I ladder your vocal stairs and believe in miracles now
    Speak to me in a color never spoken with language
    See if we read together, climbing over broken pages
    Tell me to lift higher to touch your metallic voice
    Let it rivet gold in me, bust up this dynamic noise
    Give a reason, and I will. Give me your dirty secrets
    Lie too, I'll believe it...soon we will flirt in acid reflex
    I'm standing tall now, in defiance of my human sense
    Rising while you search me out, in skies of turbulence​

    There is no turning back now, the future is present
    I plow above a past, ...without any linguistic exits
    Please, speak to me in other ways, only seen in sound
    Wow, I can't see any ground, why not just color me now?
    In dreams you are very risqué and we kiss out loud
    Up here, your messy eyes empire out silent crowns
    I don't hear you talking, but see royal lips hissing
    Your insipid breath oily, misted on wishes I'm kissing
    Tell me to shut up even, I'm very uneasy near you
    Your eyes, blood shot, sleepy in weird harmonic hue
    How did you know I'd come ? I'm so sinister seen
    I'm a fish in, out of rusty water. Oh miserable me
    Why won't you talk to me ? You're my scenic way
    In this little air balloon with big feelings displayed
    Are you God ? Your slight of hand has seen a sighting
    Inspired by black magic and I'm about to flee it fighting
    Please answer me, I'm so close now...Do you hear me ?​

    Hello and welcome traveler of questions:
    I'm electrified in your mind... my high communicates
    You have sex in your eye, little itches sweet as cakes
    No doubt about it come at me, French inhale me kid
    I'm lucid freight coming Kamikaze against the wind
    I'm not God and, yes to rainbows you're asking of
    I'm just a witch now aimed to sand blast you off
    Snort my hot breath, it's moisture, lick my fingers
    Seek my candy lips and act as trick-or-treaters
    Fear hears us not. It's of us and by us in... blood
    Drink from my neck and decide what color its of
    Fill your soul, let some spill. Your doing down now
    Spit some out in colorful trill, your going down now
    Meet in the middle of the air, seek me out in doubt
    Ladder my vocal stairs, couldn't be miracles without

    Color me black again, and I will seek you later
    Going down now, and I'll make you feel real bad
     
  2. rambleON

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    Can I get some feed on this ? thanks in advance.
     
  3. TAZER-69

    TAZER-69 Listen To Your Heart! Lifetime Supporter

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    Nice work.
     
  4. rambleON

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    Ill take that, thanks. lol
     
  5. Dejavu

    Dejavu Until the great unbanning

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    Your my scenic way should be you're. ;)
     
  6. rambleON

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    doh, fixed
     
  7. ness33

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    I have read quite a few poems in here and none that really struck me as excellent until these two lines:
    Speak to me in a color never spoken with language
    See if we read together, climbing over broken pages

    That went very smooth with the previous lines. It said everything so subtly powerful. Good work man.
     
  8. rambleON

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    thanks ness33, I'll take that.
     
  9. thedope

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    I would do her.
     
  10. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    cool story
     
  11. thedope

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    In finger paint
     
  12. rambleON

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    that's more like it
     
  13. rambleON

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    thedope, my dope thread was intially titled "thedope". It was dedicated to you, but someone changed the title.
     
  14. thedope

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    Your language is infinitely more colorful than black.
     
  15. rambleON

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    Thanks, I'll take that too. I'll take anything I can get at this point.
     
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