Bist Du Blind?

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by omnip0d, Apr 27, 2008.

  1. omnip0d

    omnip0d Member

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    Does my image interpret
    itself with your feelings?
    Do you see vacancy?
    Do you see an archaist?
    Do you feel my
    cremated passions?
    Don't draw this
    beyond it's existance.

    The problems reside in me.
    You look upon yourself,
    a glreaming facade that
    redirects your attention.
    I see you.
    Looming through your
    mists I feel your
    desperation, a need
    to hold yourself above.

    Do I look how you feel?
    Can you gaze through
    conscious mind and see
    your physical form?
    Look beyond cold,
    ferrous matter and glass,
    and just see yourself.
     
  2. weaselpop

    weaselpop Member

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    Nice twist at the end. I find it a little stiff, though.
     
  3. omnip0d

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    Stiff in what way?
     
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