Anybody writing songs?

I got hit in the head to find a music recording company. I write songs since I started learning English (about ten years ago), but I never got in the network with them. Anybody know anything?

 

this is kinda more of a poem






Sunny day but no where near
Setting ablaze my worst fear

Seems like my best days are always to hard to find always hidden in the haze

Running in a maze in my mind but never will I find this feeling I wish to feel

For anytime I think I feel it I some how never believe it to be real

I never know why, how, or what way I will die
I assure my self that my life is in my own hands and that I wont just be another person sitting in the stands

I cant ,wont ,don’t listen to what people have to say

Corrupted by their own static

But they wouldn’t have it any other way

People could do what they would normally if we all weren’t trained on the wrong things to say

But its ok

They wouldn’t have it any other way

Slowly inch by inch withered away

People ruining their world and lives day by day

But like I said they wouldn’t have it any other way

Millions die day by day

But they still act like its ok

Just as long as they keep their animals at bay

Can you say brain wash

Bleeding, screaming, burning

But just keep earning until one day they say its time to go show you love your country

But like they say

Its ok and they wouldn’t have it any other way

 

Doesn't anyone write real songs anymore? The kind with verses, choruses, sometimes bridges, and subjects other than death and sadness?

 

I write songs... a record company isn't going to find you, you've got to grab their attention, somehow. Performing often, at clubs and such, is probably what you want to be doing if you aren't doing that regularly.

Yes.

 

Good to know

 

I write some ..rarely ... years ago I would write christian stuff, and sing the songs in church too... but .... thats definately not my inspiration anymore, lol ... so no more of that...

Ive written a few love songs, tho, but I cant play guitar well enough to do much with them, but would like to..

 

LOL I have lots of them it's just that I've never networked with musicians. Here is one pop balad. I would love for somebody to critique it.




I’m Missing You Now

For all the times
We thought they were supreme
Sometimes they meant
Everything to you and me
For all the joy we’ve spent together
Under the old tree
When we both talked like friends
Just you and me

Our wishes grew in dreams
Expressed to eternity
Why separation had to be
Our destiny?

I am missing you now
I am looking for you in the middle of the town
I am missing you now
I scream to the world
You’re the only one I love
And that love will stay
Chained for my little heart
This one wish became a dream
For you to belong to me.

For all the days
We laughed but here we are
A half world far away
An ocean is dancing
Between the continents

Our dreams are coming true
You know I am on the stage for you
I wonder if you ever will
Glance at it soon?

I am missing you now
I am looking for you in the middle of the town
I am missing you now
I scream to the world
You’re the only one I love
And that love will stay
Chained for my little heart
This one wish became a dream
For you to belong to me.

 

While rhyming is not a bad thing, your rhymes sound so forced... you should never sacrifice meaning for rhyme.

"Why separation had to be
Our destiny?"
what exactly are you asking here?

"I am looking for you in the middle of the town"
This is confusing, and takes away from the rest of the song. Apart from that line, you don't give any more clues to the listener/reader that you are indeed looking for somebody.

That last stanza is really hard to read...

 

That's how it always is when people post their songs online. They post terrible work, work I'd never even dream of accepting as anything close to final, just to have something to post. When I write something, I can spend a long time writing it to get it right. Or I can finish it in twenty minutes. Both can turn out good, but if you just go with the first rhyme that comes to your mind, no matter how primitive, use it; don't bother with verses, just skip a line once in awhile; forget about choruses and bridges, and try to forget that people are actually going to be listening to this and maybe it shouldn't sound like shit, you're not gonna get a good song.

 

I've recorded this song, and play it with a few of my friends at local open mic nights...its one of the only ones i wrote that i feel comfortable playing out!


I feel Like Abby Hoffman Always spitting the truth Forced to live underground because half the worlds brains were loose
Its not that you want to be an outcast, Its just that everyone is always stuck in the past
Set in the ways of one book, That tells you What to think, Tells you how to look
Am I a master of words , I do not feel like a king. For everyone whos shot someone Should be in the tower of shame. Like rapunzel with out her long locks
Or a hippie with socks
Why were these people shot down in there hour of glory , Bullets fly, children cry what is the story
We have old men at the pearly gates ruining our childrens future and fate, We Realize its bad to hate, But what can we do or say to make the president of the united states realize its bad to take half the worlds future away

 

I thank you guys for the feedback. I've never had it before, and I had nobody reviewing my stuff. I will spend time on the "confusing lines". Yeah, there were times when I was asking myself if people will understand what I wrote. Although, I am not sure what you (Politics are awesome) mean by "forced rhyme".

 

My definition of "forced rhyme" is using a word that doesn't really fit and making it fit just to have a rhyme without taking the effort to come up with a good one.

 

thanks a lot, I'll get it fixed and I'll post it again.

 

I write a lot of songs, mostly John Mayer-esque begging for a blowjob. Here's my latest.

Well, I've started out on life
Need it all so black and white,
My eyes twist and I can see
The psychedelic ecstasy.

Well, I've started out on life
Need it all so black and white
But my eyes twisted and I could see
The psychedelic ecstasy.

The wolves they howl and circle round
Vow to tear our bridges down
The smoke and mirrors dissipate
Falling flat before our faces,

And I held you just so tight
My arms would bruise and nearly burst
But when you look at me tonight
Don’t blink, don’t say anything girl.






Well, I've started out on life
Need it all so black and white
My eyes twist and I can see
The psychedelic ecstasy.

Well, I've started out on life
Need it all so black and white
My eyes twist and I can see
The psychedelic ecstasy.

It’s all lost and at me you hurl
Curses and the strongest verbs
But I can see it in your eyes
Still holding on to that night

When I was young I vowed to find
The heart that would meld right to mine
And if you look at me tonight
Don’t blink, don’t say anything girl.

 

You're exaggerating.... right?

I don't mean to sound like an asshole...but.... you are kidding, right?

 

dunno - I don't read everything into the lyrics - i wanna know what musics going along with this stuff - I mean ...
'generals gathered in black masses just like witches at black masses'
is probably the worst lyric I ever heard - but the song is a legend

posting stuff online and getting lots of hits is easy - getting paid to do it is well ahaha NOT

 

i wish i could be a better songwriter, but mostly every thing i come up with i just dont like, or it sounds to much like someone elses song...i love playing guitar, and its always my passion, but singing and writing songs is a challenge for me that i hope to someday overcome

 

ive been writing poetry and playing guitar for 4 years im now 16 writing some great stuff i do belive though you can either write or you cant some people have it come naturally and some people dont thats just where we differ from eveyone else syd barret once said that all the shit lyrics you write you shoud always keep then no matter how shit they are here is a few lines from one of my poems
born on the winds thrown from the stars keepers of peace preatchers of war
possesion of fear loves ya alll charlie xxxx peace

 

I think I'm too picky in my writing. I throw away ideas all the time. I've literally heard lines in Beatles songs that I would not use in my own, which is pretty crazy since they were some great songwriters.

 

I write poetry and plays and I've published some stuff online and in authors collections. I just never had the chance to learn the difference between song writing and poetry, but enthusiastically I go for it!