Kidding. Same old bitching. Only none of them are quite polished yet. 1. You can't tell me you'll be here When you haven't any intention You can't make me wait Just because you don't care You can't abuse my kindness When that is all I've ever offered You can't be so fucking selfish Just because I'm vulnerable 2. You didn't break it My heart is not yours to break It's been shattered so many times You just stomped a shard beneath your shoe Like a cigarette when you're through with it 3. There's no room for me The hallway is my new home Near the drug addict And the violent teenager Nurses don't seem to see me In this lonesome plastic bed It's only a Volcano In those sweaty sheets My only visiter my mother I just had to turn myself in
lol is that good or bad? On one hand it means it must have touched you, but does anyone like having a razor on their brain?
2 and 3 are sharp and poignant. Raw emotion but not as unpolished as you think. IMO 1 didn't have the same effect, though the last 2 lines were great!
